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As the number of cars increase, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that the drivers should cover this cost. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.2

As the number of cars increase, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that the drivers should cover this cost. v. 2
It is true that there is a lot of money has been spent on improving road systems to adapt to the increase in the number of cars nowadays. While some people think that cost should be covered by the government, I believe that the drivers should contribute partly. One the one hand, there is a variety of reasons why the cost of improving road systems should be spent by the government. Firstly, if this spending can be covered by the government budget, it means its inhabitants will have more money which can be used to allows them to adapt their basic human needs. For example, in many underprivileged countries where there are many people live under detrimental living benchmark, they can save a whole of money to buy foods for their families. The second reason is that augmenting infrastructures is the responsibility of the government. Its annual budgets have been contributed by every people through tax policies, therefore, it should be used for serving social needs. One the other hand, I believe that that spending should be devoted by drivers for some reason. Firstly, if it can be paid by the drivers, the government can focus its annual budget on other social needs. For example, in Vietnam, the drivers must buy ticket whenever they used free-ways. The government used that source of money to improving hospital quality. Consequently, people will have better health care systems. Furthermore, despite the road systems spending will cost the drivers a great deal, they will have well-constructed ways to use which means that they can drive safer, faster and save a whole of spare time to do what they want, like exercising or reading books to broaden their knowledge. In conclusion, although the way that road systems spending should be paid by the government is advantageous for some reason, it seems to me that it is better while the drivers contribute a part of that cost.
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road
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systems
to adapt to the increase in the number of cars nowadays. While
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people
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cost
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be covered
by the
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government
, I believe that the
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drivers
should contribute partly.

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the one hand, there is a variety of
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reasons
why the
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cost
of improving
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road
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systems
should
be spent
by the
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government
.
Firstly
, if this
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spending
can
be covered
by the
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government
budget, it means its inhabitants will have more
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money
which can be
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used
to
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allows
them to adapt their basic human needs.
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, in
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many
underprivileged countries where there are
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many
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people
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live
under detrimental living benchmark, they can save a whole of
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money
to
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buy
foods for their families. The second
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reason
is that augmenting infrastructures is the responsibility of the
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government
. Its annual budgets have
been contributed
by every
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people
through tax policies,
therefore
, it should be
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used
for serving social needs.

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One
the other hand, I believe that that
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spending
should
be devoted
by
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drivers
for
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some
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reason
.
Firstly
, if it can
be paid
by the
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drivers
, the
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government
can focus its annual budget on other social needs.
For example
, in Vietnam, the
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drivers
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must
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buy
ticket whenever they
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used
free-ways. The
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government
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used
that source of
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money
to improving hospital quality.
Consequently
,
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people
will have better health care
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systems
.
Furthermore
, despite the
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road
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systems
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spending
will
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cost
the
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drivers
a great deal, they will have well-constructed ways to
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use
which means that they can drive safer, faster and save a whole of spare time to do what they want, like exercising or reading books to broaden their knowledge.

In conclusion
, although the way that
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road
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systems
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spending
should
be paid
by the
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government
is advantageous for
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some
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reason
, it seems to me that it is better while the
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drivers
contribute a part of that
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cost
.
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IELTS essay As the number of cars increase, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that the drivers should cover this cost. v. 2

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6.0
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