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Psychological illnesses may not be as obvious as physical disabilities or illnesses, nevertheless they are just as disabling in their own way. Society, however, is more accepting of those with physical than psychological illnesses or disabilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Psychological illnesses may not be as obvious as physical disabilities or illnesses, nevertheless they are just as disabling in their own way. Society, however, is more accepting of those with physical than psychological illnesses or disabilities. v. 1
Awareness of psychological health has become increasingly popular. Nonetheless, people come to recognize physical disability more openly than the psychological ones. However, some hold the opinion that both illnesses are enfeebling. This essay demonstrates a complete agreement with the statement. Furthermore, it will also explain why nonphysical afflictions are also essential and need to rise in awareness and acceptance. Firstly, some people accept physical disabilities more openly than psychological illnesses. People with this opinion think that it is tangible to ascertain a person's bodily injury more quickly than a mental disorder or challenge. For instance, someone wearing a cast in their arm gets more empathy when performing an outdoor activity as opposed to the empathy received by a person with a balanced impairment disorder. However, one's ability should not only be measured by their physical capacities, but also by their mental and psychological functioning. Notwithstanding, in the same manner, that a person with a physical impairment can access care and support from society, mentally incapacitated people provided with assistance. Specifically, public facilities for psychological disable might be a tremendous relief for families. Thus, designated public areas where families could meet the need of such disabilities and not face judgment or critique are imperative within an accepting society. This essay argued that society must accept mental and physical challenges that are both equally detrimental to one's health. Overall, either type of disability being physical or mental handled with support from all sectors, namely public, private, or governmental, as they both required care and attention for the well being of the affected individuals.
Awareness of
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psychological
health has become
increasingly
popular. Nonetheless,
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people
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come
to recognize
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physical
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disability
more
openly
than the
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psychological
ones.
However
,
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some
hold the opinion that both illnesses are enfeebling. This essay demonstrates a complete agreement with the statement.
Furthermore
, it will
also
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explain
why nonphysical afflictions are
also
essential and need to rise in awareness and acceptance.

Firstly
,
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some
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people
accept
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physical
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disabilities
more
openly
than
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psychological
illnesses.
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People
with this opinion
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think
that it is tangible to ascertain a person's
bodily
injury more
quickly
than a
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mental
disorder or challenge.
For instance
, someone wearing a cast in their arm
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gets
more empathy when performing an outdoor activity as opposed to the empathy received by a person with a balanced impairment disorder.

However
, one's ability should not
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only
be measured
by their
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physical
capacities,
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but
also
by their
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mental
and
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psychological
functioning. Notwithstanding, in the same manner, that a person with a
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physical
impairment can access care and support from society, mentally incapacitated
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people
provided with assistance.
Specifically
, public facilities for
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psychological
disable might be a tremendous relief for families.
Thus
, designated public areas where families could
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meet
the need of such
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disabilities
and not face judgment or critique are imperative within an accepting society.

This essay argued that society
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must
accept
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mental
and
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physical
challenges that are both
equally
detrimental to one's health.

Overall
, either type of
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disability
being
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physical
or
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mental
handled with support from all sectors,
namely
public, private, or governmental, as they both required care and attention for the
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well being
of the
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affected
individuals.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Psychological illnesses may not be as obvious as physical disabilities or illnesses, nevertheless they are just as disabling in their own way. Society, however, is more accepting of those with physical than psychological illnesses or disabilities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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