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Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree. v.8

Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. v. 8
CRIMIMALITY RATE IS INCREASES A LOT AT PRESENT THAN BEFORE. MANY COUNTRY USES PRISON PUNISHMENT AS TO REDUCE OFFENCES. WHEREAS PROVIDING PROPER KNOWLEDGE ABOUT HUMANITY AND ITS CONTRIBUTION TOWARDS THE NATION IS THE BEST METHOD TO TACKLE THIS. THIS ESSAY WILL TOTTALY AGREE WITH STATEMENT, BECAUSE EDUCATION IS KNOWN AS PILOR OF LIFE AND ONE CAN BE BETTER AFTER GAINING IT PROPERLY. IT WILL DISCUSS IN DETAIL WITH RELEVANT EXAMPLE, WHICH YOU MAY FIND BELOW. FIRST OF ALL, LITERACY TEACHES A ONE HOW TO BE A GOOD MEMBER OF THE CIVILIZATION. TO ELABORATE, AFTER THE PROPER GUIDANCE PERSON IS ABLE TO DIFFERENCIATE BETWEEN RIGHT AND WRONG, WHAT IS GOOD AND BAD FOR HIM AND SOCIETY AS WELL. FOR AN EXAMPLE, BASED ON RESEARCH DONE BY SOCIALOLGY DEPARMENT OF AN INDIAN INSTITUTE OF SOCIOLOGY IN INDIA, SAYS THAT POOR PEOPLE ARE ATTEMPTING MORE CRIME. THIS IS DUE TO NEEDY FOLKS DO NOT HAVE ENOUGH MONEY TO SUPPORT THEIR FAMILY AND CHILDRENS EDUCATION SODTS. THUS I BELIEVE BY GIVING SOME BASIC EDUCATION TO THEM, THEY CAN BE ABLE TO ACHIEVE SOMETHING GOOD FOR THEM AN FAMILY AS WELL. NONETHELESS, PRISON IS THE BEST PUNISHMENT TO GIVE AN OFFEDER FOR HIS MAJOR CRIMES LIKE ABDUCTION, SMUGLLING AND SO ON. YET THIS JUST GIVE THEM PUNISHMENT INSTEAD OF CHANGING THEIR BEHAVIOUR. IN THE DETAIL, IF OE HAS GOT IMPRESIONMENT FOR 3 YEARS. AFTER THIS WHE HE COME OUT, AGAIN HE ATTEMPTS TO DO IT BECAUSE STILL HE HAS THE SAME ATTITUDE AND CHARACTER AS HE HAD BEFOR. THIS IS WHY THIS IDEA OF PUNISHMENT IS AN UNRELIABLE ACCORDING TO ME. TO SUM UP, IT IS TRUE THAT FOR SOME MAJOR CRIME IT SHOULD BE COMPULSARY TO ALLOTE PRISON. BUT IT IS ALSO AN IMPORTAT TO LOOK AFTER THAT THE OFFENDER STOPS ATTEMPTING OFFENCES BY EDUCATIONG THEM DURING THE PUNISHMENT PERIOD.
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CRIMIMALITY
RATE IS INCREASES A LOT AT
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PRESENT
THAN
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BEFORE
.
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MANY
COUNTRY
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USES
PRISON
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PUNISHMENT
AS TO
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REDUCE
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OFFENCES
. WHEREAS PROVIDING PROPER KNOWLEDGE ABOUT HUMANITY AND ITS CONTRIBUTION TOWARDS THE NATION IS THE BEST METHOD TO TACKLE THIS. THIS ESSAY WILL
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TOTTALY
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AGREE
WITH STATEMENT,
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BECAUSE
EDUCATION
IS KNOWN
AS
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PILOR
OF LIFE AND ONE CAN BE BETTER AFTER GAINING IT
PROPERLY
. IT WILL DISCUSS IN DETAIL WITH RELEVANT EXAMPLE, WHICH YOU MAY FIND BELOW.

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FIRST OF ALL
, LITERACY TEACHES A ONE HOW TO BE A
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GOOD
MEMBER OF THE CIVILIZATION. TO ELABORATE, AFTER THE PROPER GUIDANCE PERSON IS ABLE TO
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DIFFERENCIATE
BETWEEN RIGHT AND
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WRONG
, WHAT IS
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GOOD
AND
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BAD
FOR HIM AND SOCIETY
AS WELL
. FOR AN EXAMPLE, BASED ON RESEARCH DONE BY
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SOCIALOLGY
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DEPARMENT
OF AN INDIAN INSTITUTE OF SOCIOLOGY IN INDIA, SAYS THAT POOR
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PEOPLE
ARE ATTEMPTING MORE CRIME. THIS IS DUE TO NEEDY FOLKS DO NOT HAVE
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ENOUGH
MONEY TO SUPPORT THEIR FAMILY AND
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CHILDRENS
EDUCATION
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SODTS
.
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THUS
I BELIEVE BY GIVING
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SOME
BASIC EDUCATION TO THEM, THEY CAN BE ABLE TO ACHIEVE SOMETHING
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GOOD
FOR THEM AN FAMILY
AS WELL
.

NONETHELESS, PRISON IS THE BEST
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PUNISHMENT
TO GIVE AN
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OFFEDER
FOR HIS MAJOR CRIMES LIKE ABDUCTION,
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SMUGLLING
AND
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SO
ON.
YET
THIS
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JUST
GIVE THEM
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PUNISHMENT
INSTEAD
OF CHANGING THEIR
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BEHAVIOUR
. IN THE DETAIL, IF OE HAS
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GOT
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IMPRESIONMENT
FOR 3 YEARS. AFTER THIS
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WHE
HE
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COME
OUT, AGAIN HE ATTEMPTS TO DO IT
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BECAUSE
STILL
HE HAS THE SAME ATTITUDE AND CHARACTER AS HE HAD
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BEFOR
. THIS IS WHY THIS
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IDEA
OF
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PUNISHMENT
IS AN UNRELIABLE ACCORDING TO ME.

TO SUM UP, IT IS TRUE THAT FOR
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SOME
MAJOR CRIME IT SHOULD BE
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COMPULSARY
TO
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ALLOTE
PRISON.
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BUT
IT IS
ALSO
AN
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IMPORTAT
TO LOOK AFTER THAT THE OFFENDER
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STOPS
ATTEMPTING
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OFFENCES
BY
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EDUCATIONG
THEM DURING THE
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PUNISHMENT
PERIOD.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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