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Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Don you agree ordisagree. v.6

Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Don you agree ordisagree. v. 6
It is agreed that serious well-being issues are the cause of consuming meat, therefore a fruitarian diet should be chosen instead by people. This essay partly agrees with that suggestion because of the effects on fitness by eating meat and disagree with implementing a vegan diet. The essay will first look at why people consider a vegan diet and then discuss the drawbacks of it. It is undeniable that people nowadays prefer a vegetarian diet than a meat diet because first, consuming meat promotes the development of animal agriculture. In other words, to meet the need of meat to a large-scale population, it is hard to guarantee the quality of animal farms. Therefore, those farmers would be lack of hygiene, which are suitable environments for germs and bacteria being harmful to human well-being such as chicken virus or Coronavirus. For example, recent researches from Cambridge university show that 70 percent of human diseases like cancer and heart diseases are linked to consuming meat from animal agriculture. In addition, meat contains a large amount of cholesterol and protein. Take beef as an example, over-consuming beef is the reason for gout diseases and lack of fibre for organs causing constipation. However, adopting a vegan diet could cause some health disease if people do not have enough perceptions about it. That is to say, people would be lack of nutritions because vegetables have low protein. As a consequence, malnourished is unavoidable. In conclusion, eating meat causes some health problems yet having a vegetarian diet is not always good if there is not enough of perceptions. In my opinion, people should integrate these two diets.
It is
agreed
that serious well-being issues are the cause of consuming
meat
,
therefore
a
fruitarian
diet should
be chosen
instead
by
people
. This essay partly
agrees
with that suggestion
because
of the effects on fitness by eating
meat
and disagree with implementing a vegan diet. The essay will
first
look at why
people
consider a vegan diet and then discuss the drawbacks of it.

It is undeniable that
people
nowadays prefer a vegetarian diet than a
meat
diet
because
first
, consuming
meat
promotes the development of animal agriculture.
In other words
, to
meet
the need of
meat
to a large-scale population, it is
hard
to guarantee the quality of animal farms.
Therefore
, those farmers would be lack of hygiene, which are suitable environments for germs and bacteria being harmful to human well-being such as chicken virus or Coronavirus.
For example
, recent researches from Cambridge university
show
that 70 percent of human
diseases
like cancer and heart
diseases
are linked
to consuming
meat
from animal agriculture.
In addition
,
meat
contains a large amount of cholesterol and protein. Take beef as an example, over-consuming beef is the reason for gout
diseases
and lack of
fibre
for organs causing constipation.

However
, adopting a vegan diet could cause
some
health
disease
if
people
do not have
enough
perceptions about it.
That is
to say,
people
would be lack of
nutritions
because
vegetables have low protein. As a consequence, malnourished is unavoidable.

In conclusion
, eating
meat
causes
some
health problems
yet
having a vegetarian diet is not always
good
if there is not
enough
of perceptions. In my opinion,
people
should integrate these two diets.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Don you agree ordisagree. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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