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People know that environment is important for them still responsible for damaging the environment. What are the reasons? What has to be done to motivate the people? v.1

People know that environment is important for them still responsible for damaging the environment. What are the reasons? What has to be done to motivate the people? v. 1
All the time majority of people choose from a perspective a desire, not including the job market balance. That phenomenon often leads to an ambiguous result, such as shortage workplace in one area or labourer to another and occasionally people should change the profession for this reason. Consequently, I think, people better to balance between the interests and the country needs when choosing a career, that partly corresponds with the topic statement. Firstly, people, who chose a speciality from a perspective their interest, willingly studying and will have a better result in a work. For example, the archaeologist or the teacher, especially there is evident, because of such a job has many drawbacks, so not everyone can study these courses and after labour there. Thus, people in a specific situation can choose a specialisation whatever they want. Nevertheless, few people can decline the fact that all the time countries have popular professions that after leads to controversial results. For instance, in Ukraine most popular the lawyer and opposite this worker`s career. Therefore, the attorney`s course the most expensive and has a shortage of a studying place and workplaces; however, worker`s profession has always felt a deficit on specialists. As a result, the younger specialist, who has an interest in popular specialisation, pay more for the studying and after will have uncertain the future. Hence, in this situation person, for evading of a problem in the future, should observe the job market. To conclude, all people have various interests there not all can choose a job that after has enough employment. Therefore, I believe, people necessarily should observe the labour market and after make a choice; however, they should choose a profession that as close as it is possible with their desire.
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people
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choose
from a perspective a desire, not including the
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job
market balance. That phenomenon
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often
leads to an ambiguous
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result
, such as shortage workplace in one area or
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labourer
to another and
occasionally
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people
should
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change
the
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profession
for this reason
.
Consequently
, I
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think
,
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people
better to balance between the
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interests
and the country needs when choosing a career, that partly corresponds with the topic statement.

Firstly
,
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people
, who chose a
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speciality
from a perspective their
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interest
,
willingly
studying and will have a better
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result
in a work.
For example
, the archaeologist or the teacher,
especially
there is evident,
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because
of such a
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job
has
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drawbacks,
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so
not everyone can study these courses and after
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labour
there.
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,
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people
in a specific situation can
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choose
a
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specialisation
whatever they want.

Nevertheless
, few
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people
can decline the fact that all the time countries have popular
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professions
that after leads to controversial
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results
.
For instance
, in Ukraine most popular the lawyer and opposite this
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worker`s
career.
Therefore
, the
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attorney`s
course the most expensive and has a shortage of a studying place and workplaces;
however
,
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worker`s
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profession
has always felt a deficit on specialists. As a
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result
, the younger specialist, who has an
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interest
in popular
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specialisation
, pay more for the studying and after will have uncertain the future.
Hence
, in this situation person, for evading of a problem in the future, should observe the
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job
market.

To conclude
, all
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people
have various
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interests
there not all can
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choose
a
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job
that after has
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enough
employment.
Therefore
, I believe,
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people
necessarily
should observe the
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labour
market and after
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make
a choice;
however
, they should
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choose
a
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profession
that as close as it is possible with their desire.
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IELTS essay People know that environment is important for them still responsible for damaging the environment. What are the reasons? What has to be done to motivate the people? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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