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“Prevention is better than cure” Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extend do you agree of disagree with this statement? v.1

“Prevention is better than cure” Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. v. 1
Health educ ation and preventative measures are considered as topics that the country’s health budget should investment. This belief exists because prevention is better than any illness, even states could save more money with measures focused on teaching to people how take care of a disease. I agree with this statement, due to commonly we are not used to a preventive culture, what it has had a negative impact in our lives. Many people think that the prevention is an overstatement, hence they feel that we ought to act when something bad happen, not before. A clear example of this is when the secure companies offer their products to live safer, and only a few persons hire this policy, for the reason that the majority consider that nothing bad will happen. Therefore, the cash that would be paying for a secure, would be better used when an individual is truly sick. Nevertheless, in my opinion, we should live in a culture that teaching to people to avoid illness, and the first step in this is with several education. For instance, in the school ought to have professionals specialized in medicine, which explain to children how take care them and their families. Another measure to cope to cure could be enhancing the virtual communication. For example, when a person has a cold should work from their house, for stopping contagion. In conclusion, the mentality about to act when something bad has happened should change, because this idea is finally more expensive than live with beware.
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and preventative measures
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as topics that the country’s health budget should investment. This belief exists
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because
prevention is better than any illness, even states could save more money with measures focused on teaching to
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people
how take care of a disease. I
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agree
with this statement, due to
commonly
we are not
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used
to a preventive culture, what it has had a
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negative
impact in our
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lives
.

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people
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think
that the prevention is an overstatement,
hence
they feel that we ought to act when something
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bad
happen, not
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before
. A
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clear
example of this is when the secure
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companies
offer their products to
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live
safer, and
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only
a few persons hire this policy, for the reason that the majority consider that nothing
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bad
will happen.
Therefore
, the cash that would be paying for a secure, would be better
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used
when an individual is
truly
sick.

Nevertheless
, in my opinion, we should
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live
in a culture that teaching to
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people
to avoid illness, and the
first
step in this is with
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several education
.
For instance
, in the school ought to have professionals specialized in medicine, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
to children how take care them and their families. Another measure to cope to cure could be enhancing the virtual communication.
For example
, when a person has a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
should work from their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
, for stopping contagion.

In conclusion
, the mentality about to act when something
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bad
has happened should
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change
,
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because
this
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idea
is
finally
more expensive than
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live
with beware.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay “Prevention is better than cure” Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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