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"Prevention is better than cure. " Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree. v.22

"Prevention is better than cure. " Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. v. 22
People have different perspectives about the way of remaining fit. Although some people say that gymnasiums only help to stay fit, others believe that there are many ways other than giving to the gym. In my opinion, people can stay in the pink of health by doing many activities and they do not need to go to any institution or club for staying fit. On the one hand, some people contemplate that to remain healthy they should go to the gym. The reason behind this thinking is that they believe the professional trainers of a gym provide different types of guidelines, which facilitates people to stay lean. For example, a gym, which is situated in Banani, Dhaka, arranges special programs one every month to give techniques about the health issues to its members. Moreover, people get inspiration when they see that other members are doing physical exercises daily in the gym and getting benefits. Apart from that the disciplinary environment also motivate people to go to the gym regularly and remain fit. On the other hand, it is believed by some people that there are many better ways except gymnasium to remain healthy both physically and mentally, and I agree. The most effective way is to maintain a balance diet. If a person can avoid oily, unhygienic, and high calorie foods, then he or she can prevent any fatal diseases. For instance, recently a research study found that 80% people are suffering from the different diseases because of having unhealthy foods. Another worth mentioning method is walking or jogging in the morning. Strolling in the morning not only good for physical health, but also one of the best ways to remove tension and anxiety. For illustration, scientists have found that the tranquil environment in the morning helps a person to stay relaxed. In conclusion, although people have different views on the methods of remaining fit, I think, alternative methods other than going to the gym are better.
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perspectives about
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of remaining fit. Although
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people
say that gymnasiums
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help
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fit, others believe that there are
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many
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ways
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other
than giving to the
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. In my opinion,
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people
can
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stay
in the pink of health by doing
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activities and
they do not need to go to any institution or club for staying fit.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
contemplate that to remain healthy they should go to the
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gym
. The reason behind this thinking is that they believe the professional trainers of a
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gym
provide
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different
types of guidelines, which facilitates
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people
to
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stay
lean.
For example
, a
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gym
, which
is situated
in
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Banani
, Dhaka, arranges special programs one every month to give techniques about the health issues to its members.
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,
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people
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get
inspiration when they
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see
that
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other
members are doing physical exercises daily in the
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gym
and getting benefits. Apart from that the disciplinary environment
also
motivate
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people
to go to the
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gym
regularly
and remain fit.

On the
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other
hand, it
is believed
by
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that there are
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better
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ways
except gymnasium to remain healthy both
physically
and mentally, and I
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agree
. The most effective
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way
is to maintain a balance diet. If a person can avoid oily, unhygienic, and high calorie foods, then he or she can
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prevent
any fatal diseases.
For instance
, recently a research study found that 80%
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people
are suffering from the
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different
diseases
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because
of having unhealthy foods. Another worth mentioning method is walking or jogging in the morning. Strolling in the morning not
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only
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good
for physical health,
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also
one of the best
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ways
to remove tension and anxiety. For illustration, scientists have found that the tranquil environment in the morning
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helps
a person to
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stay
relaxed.

In conclusion
, although
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people
have
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different
views on the methods of remaining fit, I
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think
, alternative methods
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other
than going to the
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gym
are better.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay "Prevention is better than cure. " Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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