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Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.17

Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. with this statement? v. 17
In this world, many people are suffering from serious diseases such as cancer or heart diseases. So healthcare scientists and doctor advised to take regular exercise or eat healthy food. That is the reason why a government spending a large proportion of health budget on health education and preventative measures instead of treatment. I completely agree with this viewpoint. Firstly, I think that spending a huge amount of money on treatment, medicines, lad tests, doctor' fees or discovery of vaccination is not necessary. It will reduce overall medical costs and contribute to the economic development in the country. This extravagance can be easily diminished when health campaigns can encourage people to join the health teaching system in order to improve health to avoid preventable diseases. For example, in Viet Nam, the rate of smoker increasing so the administration appeal to join educational programs, many people won’t attack by the severe sickness. It will save a large amount of money instead of spending on lung cancer. Secondly, spending money on health education is essential. That will help the country to have healthier citizens. They will contribute greatly to economic development. For example, during the COVID 19 pandemic, Europeans did not wear masks to protect themselves lead to the death toll in Europe rapidly increasing and seriously affect the economy. In clusion, I think that the country and individuals can save a large amount of money by diverting from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. That has lots of benefits for development. In general, it will make life better.
In this world,
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many
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people
are suffering from serious diseases such as cancer or heart diseases.
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So
healthcare scientists and doctor advised to take regular exercise or eat healthy food.
That is
the reason why a
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government
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spending
a large proportion of
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health
budget on
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health
education and preventative measures
instead
of treatment. I completely
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agree
with this viewpoint.

Firstly
, I
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think
that
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spending
a huge amount of
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money
on treatment, medicines, lad
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tests
, doctor' fees or discovery of vaccination is not necessary. It will
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reduce
overall
medical costs and contribute to the economic development in the country. This extravagance can be
easily
diminished when
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health
campaigns can encourage
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people
to
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join
the
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health
teaching system in order to
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improve
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health
to avoid preventable diseases.
For example
, in
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Viet
Nam, the rate of smoker increasing
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so
the administration appeal to
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join
educational programs,
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many
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people
won’t attack by the severe sickness. It will save a large amount of
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money
instead
of
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spending
on lung cancer.

Secondly
,
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spending
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money
on
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health
education is essential. That will
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help
the country to have healthier citizens. They will contribute
greatly
to economic development.
For example
, during the
Did you mean "COVID-19" or the alternative spelling "Covid-19" (= coronavirus)?
COVID 19
pandemic, Europeans did not wear masks to protect themselves lead to the death toll in Europe
rapidly
increasing and
seriously
affect the economy.

In
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clusion
, I
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think
that the country and individuals can save a large amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
by diverting from treatment to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spending
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
education and preventative measures. That has lots of benefits for development.
In general
, it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
life better.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. with this statement? v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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