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“Prevention is better than cure. ” Out of country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.11

“Prevention is better than cure. ” Out of country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. with this statement? v. 11
Based on a popular saying, “Prevention is better than cure”, it is argued that the country’s health budget should be allocated in a way that a significant sum of treatment is set aside for health education and preventive measures. This essay agrees that a country’s health budget should be spent mostly on proactive measures rather than on reactive ones. This essay will discuss how spending on health awareness and preventive arrangements impeccably reduces the possibility of diseases and saves an enormous amount of resources of a country. A major chance of disease is reduced by raising general health awareness in public. Health awareness programs not only enlighten people about the benefit of maintaining a healthy lifestyle, but they also create an understanding of the causes of different diseases. For instance, people who participate in health education programs are more likely to take better care of themselves and their families against diseases. Secondly, a significant amount of resources of a country is saved by spending on health and prevention awareness ventures. A country surrounded by different health issues not only spends heavily on treating those diseases, but also incurs a notable loss of overall country’s economic productivity. For example, if the majority of the workforce of a country is unable to perform efficiently due to health issues, the country faces a huge loss of income which is far greater than the amount they could spend on preventing those diseases. In conclusion, a country’s health budget should be spent more on proactive measures than on reactive ones. This will not only diminish the chances of illness in people, but also cause enormous savings of a country’s resources which can be spent on other areas for further betterment of its citizens.
Based on a popular saying, “Prevention is better than cure”, it
is argued
that the
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country’s
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health
budget should
be allocated
in a way that a significant sum of treatment
is set
aside for
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health
education and preventive measures. This essay
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agrees
that a
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country’s
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health
budget should
be spent
mostly
on proactive measures
rather
than on reactive
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ones
. This essay will discuss how spending on
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health
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awareness
and preventive arrangements
impeccably
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reduces
the possibility of
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diseases
and saves an enormous amount of resources of a country.

A major chance of
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disease
is
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reduced
by raising general
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health
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awareness
in public.
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Health
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awareness
programs not
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only
enlighten
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people
about the benefit of maintaining a healthy lifestyle,
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but
they
also
create an understanding of the causes of
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different
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diseases
.
For instance
,
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people
who participate in
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health
education programs are more likely to take better care of themselves and their families against diseases.

Secondly
, a significant amount of resources of a
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country
is saved
by spending on
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health
and prevention
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awareness
ventures. A
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country
surrounded by
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different
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health
issues not
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only
spends
heavily
on treating those
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diseases
,
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but
also
incurs a notable loss of
overall
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country’s
economic productivity.
For example
, if the majority of the workforce of a
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country
is unable to perform
efficiently
due to
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health
issues, the
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country
faces a huge loss of income which is far greater than the amount they could spend on preventing those diseases.

In conclusion
, a
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country’s
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health
budget should
be spent
more on proactive measures than on reactive
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ones
. This will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
diminish the chances of illness in
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people
,
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but
also
cause enormous savings of a
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country’s
resources which can
be spent
on other areas for
further
betterment of its citizens.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay “Prevention is better than cure. ” Out of country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. with this statement? v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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