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"Prevention is better than cure. " Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.16

"Prevention is better than cure. " Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. with this statement? v. 16
It is often argued that instead of increasing funding in medical research and treating diseases, it is better to spend in amenities that keep people fit. I personally believe that prevention and treating sick people are equally important. To begin with, preventive measures protect many people from getting ill. Meanwhile, proper education and vaccination of diseases are the two courses of actions taken by the government to protect people from deadly diseases have already been proved to be effective. This plan has prevented many diseases from spreading worldwide. For example, as per a survey in 2008 in Nepal, polio eradication program declined the number of patients significantly. Additionally, curing diseases is impossible without sufficient medical Study. Though medical research and treating diseases need a high cost, it is equally important to save the life of infected people by finding actual causes and treatments. Many new diseases are evolving now and then. It is not possible to find the preventive measures without researching the form of diseases. For instance, an article regarding the health sector in Africa dictates that analysis conclude the cause of endemic death and aware people from actually getting infected from many fatal diseases. Hence, researching and treating diseases is also an important element for a healthy nation. In conclusion, preventive measures are quite important to aware people to have a healthy lifestyle and to remain fit. A good portion of the national budget should thus be allocated to achieve this. But this does not mean that healthcare service, medical research and treatment facilities should get less funds and priorities.
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often
argued that
instead
of increasing funding in
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medical
research and
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treating
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diseases
, it is better to spend in amenities that
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keep
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people
fit. I
personally
believe that prevention and
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treating
sick
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people
are
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important
. To
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begin
with, preventive measures protect
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many
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people
from getting ill. Meanwhile, proper education and vaccination of
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diseases
are the two courses of actions taken by the
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government
to protect
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people
from deadly
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diseases
have already
been proved
to be effective. This plan has
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prevented
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many
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diseases
from spreading worldwide.
For example
, as per a survey in 2008 in Nepal, polio eradication program declined the number of patients
significantly
.
Additionally
, curing
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diseases
is impossible without sufficient
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medical
Study. Though
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medical
research and
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treating
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diseases
need a high cost, it is
equally
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important
to save the life of infected
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people
by finding actual causes and treatments.
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new
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diseases
are evolving
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now
and then. It is not possible to find the preventive measures without researching the form of
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diseases
.
For instance
, an article regarding the health sector in Africa dictates that analysis conclude the cause of endemic death and aware
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people
from actually getting infected from
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many
fatal
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diseases
.
Hence
, researching and
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treating
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diseases
is
also
an
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important
element for a healthy nation.
In conclusion
, preventive measures are quite
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important
to aware
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people
to have a healthy lifestyle and to remain fit. A
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good
portion of the national budget should
thus
be allocated
to achieve this.
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But
this does not mean that healthcare service,
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medical
research and treatment facilities should
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get
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun funds is countable.
less
funds and priorities.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay "Prevention is better than cure. " Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. with this statement? v. 16

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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