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Pressure on the school and university students is increasing and students are pushed too hard work when they are young. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v.1

Pressure on the school and university students is increasing and students are pushed too hard work when they are young. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 1
Nowadays, education playing a vital role in every people's lives. In recent days, learners are pressured by the school and university and this growing as well as students have to do too hard work when they are not much older. I largely believe. It is a negative improvement. My reasons are justified further Discussing the reasons the students are pressured that's why they are doing it if they do not do it by heart, they can't learn and understand it and which is not useful. In addition to that, sometimes children do not have interest on the subject even though they pressurised and they have to do which effect mentally on them, they feel stressed and so do wrong things, which sometimes create an impact on their families or personally. Moreover, sometimes in the school children which are not capable of doing so much hard task the school put pressure on them to do and create a bad influence because the students which are not capable they think they will fail and do wrong things. Similarly, some projects are given to them which are too much time consuming and they have to submit it in a short time and for that they have to work day and night so that's why some health issues are faced by them. Some students cannot handle that much mental pressure so they take wrong steps which effect badly on them Overall. It can be concluded education is a very important part of the life, but if we pressurised children to do it which are young to do it, it affects negatively to their life and mental abilities.
Nowadays, education playing a vital role in every
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are pressured
by the school and university and this growing
as well
as
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students
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have to
do too
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hard
work when they are not
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much
older. I
largely
believe. It is a
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negative
improvement. My reasons
are justified
further


Discussing the reasons the
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students
are pressured
that's why they are doing it if they do not do it by heart, they can't learn and understand it and which is not useful.
In addition
to that,
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sometimes
children do not have interest on the subject
even though
they
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pressurised and
they
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have to
do which effect mentally on them, they feel
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stressed
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so
do
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wrong
things, which
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sometimes
create an impact on their families or
personally
.

Moreover
,
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sometimes
in the school children which are not capable of doing
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so
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much
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hard
task the school put pressure on them to do and create a
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bad
influence
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because
the
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students
which are not capable they
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think
they will fail and do
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wrong
things.
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,
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some
projects are
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given
to them which are too
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time consuming
and they
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have to
submit it in a short time and for that they
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have to
work day and night
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so
that's why
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some
health issues
are faced
by them.
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students
cannot handle that
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much
mental pressure
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so
they take
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wrong
steps which effect
badly
on
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them


Overall
. It can
be concluded
education is a
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very
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important
part of the life,
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but
if we
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pressurised
children to do it which are young to do it, it affects
negatively
to their life and mental abilities.
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IELTS essay Pressure on the school and university students is increasing and students are pushed too hard work when they are young. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 1

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  American English
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