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Pollution and waste are increasing everyday. What problems can these cause to the ordinary people? How can these problems be resolved? v.1

Pollution and waste are increasing everyday. What problems can these cause to the ordinary people? How can these problems be resolved? v. 1
In this contemporary world, waste and pollution are increasing day by day, and its an alarming issue which is troubling everyone. There are numerous problems that individuals face because of this concern, such as serious health problems. This essay will discuss these problems in the following paragraphs and will suggest some great ways to overcome this. To begin with, there are a number of problems that ordinary masses are facing. The first and most important is serious health diseases. To explain further, due to a rise in waste and pollution, the air quality is degrading day by day which is affecting people's health adversely. In other words, nowhere is the fresh environment where one can breath and do some exercise. To exemplify, there was a recent case captured by the "Delhi police", where a young boy suffered from lung cancer due to the high level of air pollution in Delhi. Moving on to the solutions, there can be several ways to overcome this boiling concern. Firstly, the government should encourage the awareness campaigns so that people can get a better understanding of the problems comes with high level of pollution and they can then work together to deal with it. Secondly, the government should impose a heavy fine on individuals and companies who do not follow the rules and regulations. For instance, In India the authorities have proposed a new system to reduce the waste level and under this law if anyone who does not follow the law has to pay a penalty which is now encouraging people to provide their help in reducing the level of pollution and garbage. By the way of conclusion, although because of high level of pollutant air people are suffering from serious health diseases, the government can take some necessary actions to get rid of this issue.
In this contemporary world, waste and
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pollution
are increasing day by day, and its an alarming issue which is troubling everyone. There are numerous
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problems
that individuals face
because of this
concern, such as serious
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health
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problems
. This essay will discuss these
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problems
in the following paragraphs and will suggest
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some
great ways to overcome this.

To
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begin
with, there are a number of
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problems
that ordinary masses are facing. The
first
and most
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important
is serious
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health
diseases. To
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explain
further
, due to a rise in waste and
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pollution
, the air quality is degrading day by day which is affecting
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people
's
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health
adversely
.
In other words
, nowhere is the fresh environment where one can
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breath
and do
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some
exercise. To exemplify, there was a recent case captured by the
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Delhi police
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, where a young boy suffered from lung cancer due to the high
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level
of air
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pollution
in Delhi.

Moving on to the solutions, there can be several ways to overcome this boiling concern.
Firstly
, the
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government
should encourage the awareness campaigns
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so
that
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people
can
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get
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problems
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comes
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level
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pollution and
they can then work together to deal with it.
Secondly
, the
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government
should impose a heavy fine on individuals and
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companies
who do not follow the
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rules
and regulations.
For instance
, In India the authorities have proposed a new system to
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reduce
the waste
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level
and under this law if anyone who does not follow the law
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has to
pay a penalty which is
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now
encouraging
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people
to provide their
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help
in reducing the
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level
of
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pollution
and garbage.

By the way of conclusion, although
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because
of high
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level
of pollutant air
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people
are suffering from serious
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health
diseases, the
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government
can take
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some
necessary actions to
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get
rid of this issue.
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IELTS essay Pollution and waste are increasing everyday. What problems can these cause to the ordinary people? How can these problems be resolved? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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