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Pollution and wastes are increasing everyday. What problems can these cause to the ordinary people? How can these problems resolved? v.1

Pollution and wastes are increasing everyday. What problems can these cause to the ordinary people? How can these problems resolved? v. 1
In this era, as the population is growing immensely, it has affected the living condition of an individual through pollution increasing day by day and wastes which is being produced either from household tasks or from automobiles. As a result, the problems which arise from these, will cost a serious health issues; respiratory problems to be precise. Fortunately, there are certain remedies in order to erradicate these problems like construction of roads to control pollution and by the method of incineration, wastes can be managed to some extent. To begin with, the issues that occur as a result of growing pollution can be the welcoming of dangerous health risks in people lives. Probably the chronic diseases of respiratory system. For instance, due to air pollution there may be presence of severe respiratory diseases such as asthma, emphysema, lung abscess and so on. This will ultimately put their lives into danger. However, this can be minimized if the government think ways to implement rules and regulations strictly regarding control of public and private transports as it pollute the surrounding area vastly because of it produces harmful gases. Hence, if this strategy will enact successfully, there might be a high chance to make the country pollution-free. Furthermore, an issue of increase in waste products can also interfere to live a healthy life. Inspite of disposing the wastes in a covered area, people are neglecting it. As a result of this, people are experiencing a worst scenario of unhygienic environment. In other words, the food and water sources are being contaminated either directly or indirectly. Having said that, the measures to overcome this problem can be a process of incineration where the wastes will burn completely and wisely. Also, an awareness programme can be encouraged to carry out in different places in order to educate people about the warning signs of wastes thrown irresponsibly. To conclude, an increase in pollution as well as waste products give rise to certain problems associated with one's health. Therefore, to alleviate these rising issues, government should take responsibility to manage automobiles to reduce pollution, while for waste management, incineration method needs to be introduced.
In this era, as the population is growing
immensely
, it has
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affected
the living condition of an individual through
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pollution
increasing day by day and
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wastes
which is
being produced
either from household tasks or from automobiles.
As a result
, the
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problems
which arise from these, will cost a serious health
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issues
; respiratory
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problems
to be precise.
Fortunately
, there are certain remedies in order to
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erradicate
these
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problems
like construction of roads to control
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pollution
and by the method of incineration,
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wastes
can
be managed
to
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some
extent.

To
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begin
with, the
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issues
that occur
as a result
of growing
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pollution
can be the welcoming of
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dangerous
health
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risks
in
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people
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lives
.
Probably
the chronic diseases of respiratory system.
For instance
, due to air
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pollution
there may be presence of severe respiratory diseases such as asthma, emphysema, lung abscess and
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so
on. This will
ultimately
put their
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lives
into
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danger
.
However
, this can
be minimized
if the
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government
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think
ways to implement
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rules
and regulations
strictly
regarding control of public and private transports as it pollute the surrounding area
vastly
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because
of it produces harmful gases.
Hence
, if this strategy will enact
successfully
, there might be a high chance to
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make
the country pollution-free.

Furthermore
, an
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issue
of increase in
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waste
products can
also
interfere to
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live
a healthy life.
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Inspite
of disposing the
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wastes
in a covered area,
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people
are neglecting it.
As a result
of this,
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people
are experiencing
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a
worst scenario of unhygienic environment.
In other words
, the food and water sources are
being contaminated
either
directly
or
indirectly
. Having said that, the measures to overcome this
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problem
can be a process of incineration where the
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wastes
will burn completely and
wisely
.
Also
, an awareness
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programme
can
be encouraged
to carry out in
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different
places in order to educate
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people
about the warning signs of
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wastes
thrown
irresponsibly
.

To conclude
, an increase in
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pollution
as well
as
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waste
products give rise to certain
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problems
associated with one's health.
Therefore
, to alleviate these rising
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issues
,
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government
should take responsibility to manage automobiles to
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reduce
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pollution
, while for
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waste
management, incineration method needs to
be introduced
.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Pollution and wastes are increasing everyday. What problems can these cause to the ordinary people? How can these problems resolved? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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