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Plants can provide food, shelter, clothing, or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country? v.3

Plants can provide food, shelter, clothing, or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country? v. 3
Plants play a very important role in our everyday life and our very existence depends on the oxygen we breathe which is produced by the plants. They give us oxygen, provide different medicines, clothing and food. Every country has its own staple food that dominates in the diet of dwellers of that country. For example, the staple food for Japan and Korea is rice. As for me, I am from Russia and our staple plants are potato and wheat. Some people in my country believe that wheat is the most important plant because it provides full and nutritious meals. People bake bread and cookies, cook kasha and soup. At old times people in Russia raised wheat and prayed for the good harvest in order to survive. Millet has a good storage time so it gives the opportunity to consume it a whole year. Thus this was an important plant in my country for a long. However, nowadays bread is no longer of that importance. A person has more products to choose from. Besides, some people tend to exclude bread from their diet in order to decrease their daily calorie intake and lose some weight. Personally, I think that potato is a more important plant than wheat in Russia and this is the kind of plant I like the most due to its extensive usefulness and our reliance on it. Virtually, every Russian has potato every day at least once. One can boil, fry, bake or mash it. My favourite meal is baked potato with cheese and a glass of milk. I think it is delicious and it does not take much time to cook it. Moreover, potatoes are easier to raise and store. To conclude, I think that potato by far is the most important plant in Russia and this is why I consider it as the most important plant in my country and also for the Russian people.
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role in our everyday life and our
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very
existence depends on the oxygen we breathe which
is produced
by the
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plants
. They give us oxygen, provide
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different
medicines, clothing and food. Every
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country
has its
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staple food that dominates in the diet of dwellers of that
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country
.
For example
, the staple food for Japan and Korea is rice. As for me, I am from Russia and our staple
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plants
are
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potato
and wheat.

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people
in my
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believe that wheat is the most
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important
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plant
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it provides full and nutritious meals.
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bake bread and cookies, cook
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kasha
and soup. At
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times
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in Russia raised wheat and prayed for the
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good
harvest in order to survive. Millet has a
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storage time
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it gives the opportunity to consume it a whole year.
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this was an
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for a long.

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, nowadays bread is no longer of that importance. A person has more products to choose from.
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,
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tend to exclude bread from their diet in order to decrease their daily calorie intake and lose
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weight.
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, I
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potato
is a more
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plant
than wheat in Russia and this is the kind of
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I like the most due to its extensive usefulness and our reliance on it.
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, every Russian has
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potato
every day at least once. One can boil, fry, bake or mash it. My
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meal
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potato
with cheese and a glass of milk. I
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think
it is delicious and it does not take much time to cook it.
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,
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potatoes
are easier to raise and store.

To conclude
, I
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that
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potato
by far is the most
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plant
in Russia and this is why I consider it as the most
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in my
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and
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for the Russian
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people
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Plants can provide food, shelter, clothing, or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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