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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant area of cities and towns. while other believe housing facilities should be built instead. Do agree or disagree? v.4

Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant area of cities and towns. while other believe housing facilities should be built instead. Do agree or disagree? v. 4
It is clear that planting trees is beneficial for the environment. While many think more apartments should be built in empty areas around the city. I believe growing trees in these areas is a much better approach to ensure a good atmosphere for our future generations. Firstly, plants are known to reduce air pollution. This is because they produce oxygen, which is an important part of the atmosphere. For instance, the Green Delhi project to plant ten thousand tress was very successful in decreasing pollution. In addition, green areas provide a balance in big cities. They enrich the soil, which can be permanently damaged if we remove them. Also, they recycle the existing toxic air that is produced by the industries and automobile traffic. Secondly, metropolitans are getting overcrowded. This is putting a huge strain on the government. They are not able yo provide the basic facilities for their citizens. For example, Delhi does not have enough public transport or hospitals according to its population. The situation is getting worse because of the increasing number of people coming in every year. Furthermore, the diseases spread fast in crowded areas. To illustrate, in flu and dengue season, you can rarely get a bed in hospitals across Delhi. If we start building more housing facilities, the situation will get even worse. To conclude, unless the government makes strict rules with regards to population control of a city, these problems will only escalate. The metropolitans are struggling to provide for their current residents. So, instead of building more houses, we should plant more trees.
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clear
that planting trees is beneficial for the environment.
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While
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many
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think
more apartments should
be built
in empty
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areas
around the city. I believe growing trees in these
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areas
is a much better approach to ensure a
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good
atmosphere for our future generations.

Firstly
, plants
are known
to
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reduce
air pollution. This is
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because
they produce oxygen, which is an
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important
part of the atmosphere.
For instance
, the Green Delhi project to plant ten thousand
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tress
was
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very
successful in decreasing pollution.
In addition
, green
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areas
provide a balance in
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big
cities. They enrich the soil, which can be
permanently
damaged if we remove them.
Also
, they recycle the existing toxic air that
is produced
by the industries and automobile traffic.

Secondly
, metropolitans are getting overcrowded. This is putting a huge strain on the
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government
. They are not able
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yo
provide the basic facilities for their citizens.
For example
, Delhi does not have
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enough
public transport or hospitals according to its population. The situation is getting worse
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because
of the increasing number of
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people
coming in every year.
Furthermore
, the diseases spread
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fast
in crowded
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
. To illustrate, in flu and dengue season, you can rarely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a bed in hospitals across Delhi. If we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
building more housing facilities, the situation will
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get
even worse.

To conclude
, unless the
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government
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makes
strict
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rules
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
population control of a city, these problems will
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only
escalate. The metropolitans are struggling to provide for their
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current
residents.
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So
,
instead
of building more
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houses
, we should plant more trees.
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IELTS essay Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant area of cities and towns. while other believe housing facilities should be built instead. Do agree or disagree? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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