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Planting trees is very important. some people says that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and town, while others says that housing facilities should be build instead. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Planting trees is very important. some people says that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and town, while others says that housing facilities should be build instead. v. 3
To plant trees in the community is essential and a few people opined that trees should be planted in areas of cities and town that are not occupied. However, others suggest that housing facilities should be constructed rather than the planting of trees. I disagree with this opinion because trees can help regulate the atmosphere while building of houses increases congestion in an environment. Firstly, when houses are constructed on vacant sites in the urban areas, they tend to congest such vicinities and prevent adequate fresh air from circulating. Developing shelters can also mean more population in the vicinity and this can result in different types of pollution such as air pollution and noise pollution. For example, more residential buildings mean more people will reside in the community and engage it activities that may pollute the vicinity. Furthermore, trees have been found to keep the earth cool by controlling and regulating the degree of hotness from the sun and as a result of this, prevents global warming. Also, trees have been found to beautify the environment. The presence of trees in an area creates serenity and beauty to such places. Because of this, people can sit or rest under trees peacefully. For instance, people are seen having picnics at Ikeja way were several trees are planted and they do so because of the serenity and peacefulness it brings. In conclusion, instead of constructing houses on empty sites in urban communities, it is better to plant trees so as to shade the residents against the hot sun and also provide them with quietness and peacefulness.
To plant
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trees
in the community is essential and a few
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people
opined that
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trees
should
be planted
in areas of cities and town that are not occupied.
However
, others suggest that housing facilities should
be constructed
rather
than the planting of
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trees
. I disagree with this opinion
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because
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trees
can
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help
regulate the atmosphere while building of
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houses
increases congestion in an environment.

Firstly
, when
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houses
are constructed
on vacant sites in the urban areas, they tend to congest such
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vicinities
and
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prevent
adequate fresh air from circulating. Developing shelters can
also
mean more population in the vicinity and this can result in
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different
types of pollution such as air pollution and noise pollution.
For example
, more residential buildings mean more
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people
will reside in the community and engage it activities that may pollute the vicinity.

Furthermore
,
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trees
have
been found
to
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keep
the earth cool by controlling and regulating the degree of hotness from the sun and
as a result
of this,
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prevents
global warming.
Also
,
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trees
have
been found
to beautify the environment. The presence of
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trees
in an area creates serenity and beauty to such places.
Because of this
,
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people
can sit or rest under
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trees
peacefully
.
For instance
,
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people
are
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seen
having picnics at
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Ikeja
way were several
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trees
are
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planted and
they do
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so
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because
of the serenity and peacefulness it brings.

In conclusion
,
instead
of constructing
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houses
on empty sites in urban communities, it is better to plant
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trees
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
shade the residents against the hot sun and
also
provide them with quietness and peacefulness.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Planting trees is very important. some people says that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and town, while others says that housing facilities should be build instead. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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