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Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.9

Using animals in medical research is very popular. That is why some people think that it is acceptable. I think it is not all time and you will need a special license to do it. Animal protection society would not give a chance without it. However, Some people think oppositely and they think it is a serious crime. First of all, I am agree with people who think animals are a suitable option to check various medical researches, pills, and medical experiments for the benefit of humanity if They have a license to do it. People are used to do these experiments without any license for a long time. But nowadays it is not a possible and serious crime. Furthermore, most animals especially mammal's body structure is similar to us and they will react for pills like us.
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IELTS essay Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong.

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