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Planting trees is very important. some people says that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and town, while others says that housing facilities should be build instead. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Planting trees is very important. some people says that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and town, while others says that housing facilities should be build instead. v. 2
Trees play a very important role in the human life. While some opine that it is imperative to grow trees on the barren lands, others feel shelters for the poor are extremely essential. I believe people should plant trees more that build houses on the empty grounds. Let us discuss why trees are more important than houses. To begin, It is evident that human and animal life to sustain in this planet, oxygen is vital to breathe and the main source that produces this gas are trees and plants, which also contributes in reducing the carbon footprints. Planting many trees in our surroundings could aid in reducing the effects of global warming and climate change. For example, a recent survey conducted by the Times India showed that the air quality of Kerala state has improved dramatically because of planting thousands of trees every year by the local students. Also, the temperature in some places has reduced as the carbon percentage in the atmosphere has drastically reduced. For these reasons, trees should be planed wherever possible. Conversely, many unfortunate people in this world are homeless and they always struggle to find shelter. Such misery has propelled people to build houses in places, which are usually used for recreational activities such as playing cricket or football. For example, a playground in my locality was converted into a refugee camp and outsiders were provided with a room and free meals with other facilities such as free education and internet connection. In conclusion, growing tress by people in society is a positive development and it should be encouraged. Trees can be beneficial because they help to revitalize the environment and reduce green gasses. Therefore, people should plant trees wherever possible. Although there are many people without homes, state should find alternate ways to accommodate them in the locality.
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role in the human life. While
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some
opine that it is imperative to grow
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trees
on the barren lands, others feel shelters for the poor are
extremely
essential.

I believe
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people
should plant
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trees
more that build
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houses
on the empty grounds.
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us discuss why
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trees
are more
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important
than
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houses
.

To
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begin
, It is evident that human and animal life to sustain in this planet, oxygen is vital to breathe and the main source that produces this gas are
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trees
and plants, which
also
contributes in reducing the carbon footprints. Planting
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many
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trees
in our surroundings could aid in reducing the effects of global warming and climate
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change
.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by the Times India
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showed
that the air quality of Kerala state has
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improved
dramatically
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because
of planting thousands of
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trees
every year by the local students.
Also
, the temperature in
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some
places has
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reduced
as the carbon percentage in the atmosphere has
drastically
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reduced
. For these reasons,
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trees
should
be planed
wherever possible.

Conversely
,
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many
unfortunate
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people
in this world are
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homeless and
they always struggle to find shelter. Such misery has propelled
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people
to build
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houses
in places, which are
usually
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used
for recreational activities such as playing cricket or football.
For example
, a playground in my locality
was converted
into a refugee camp and outsiders
were provided
with a room and free meals with other facilities such as free education and internet connection.

In conclusion
, growing tress by
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people
in society is a
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positive
development and it should
be encouraged
.
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Trees
can be beneficial
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because
they
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help
to revitalize the environment and
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reduce
green gasses.
Therefore
,
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people
should plant
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trees
wherever possible. Although there are
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many
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people
without homes, state should find alternate ways to accommodate them in the locality.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Planting trees is very important. some people says that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and town, while others says that housing facilities should be build instead. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
304 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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