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Physical appearance may play an important role in many spheres of life: in the person’s success in school, in relationships with people, in the choice of a career path. Say whether you agree or disagree with it, and if you see it as a positive or negative factor. v.1

Physical appearance may play an important role in many spheres of life: in the person’s success in school, in relationships with people, in the choice of a career path. Say whether you agree or disagree with it, and if you see it as a positive or negative factor. v. 1
It is argued that the way a person looks play a critical role in their success, career path and social and personal life of an individual. This essay totally disagrees with the statement because most people achieve goals through studious and diligence and further explains how physical appearances have a negative influence over people. To attain a high status in one's life, dedication and hard work play a significant part. Unlike cinema field, all other departments do not require good looks to become famous. Even in the interview, HR select a candidate based on their attitude, not because of physical appearance. With handsomeness, one can get a relationship, but it doesn't last long unless he has a pure heart. It is well explained by a proverb "All that glitters are not gold". Although inner soul is valued, one should maintain the appearance to be decent in order to be respected by others. Some may believe a beautiful face matters the most and it results in ruining their career. They easily tend to lose confidence when they face failures as they are in deception that everything they touch, will turn into victory because of their looks. It is the adult's duty to make aware of those illusions of a toddler in early period or else this might create a gloomy impact on offsprings. In conclusion, one can accomplish a greater foot by committing themselves to a goal through meticulous work and physical appearances have no impact on those truimph.
It
is argued
that the way a person looks play a critical role in their success, career path and social and personal life of an individual. This essay
totally
disagrees with the statement
because
most
people
achieve goals through studious and diligence and
further
explains
how physical
appearances
have a
negative
influence over
people
.

To attain a high status in one's life, dedication and
hard
work play a significant part. Unlike cinema field, all other departments do not require
good
looks to become
famous
. Even in the interview, HR select a candidate based on their attitude, not
because
of physical
appearance
. With handsomeness, one can
get
a relationship,
but
it doesn't last long unless he has a pure heart. It is well
explained
by a proverb
"
All that glitters are not gold
"
. Although inner soul
is valued
, one should maintain the
appearance
to be decent in order to
be respected
by others.

Some
may
believe
a
beautiful
face matters the most and it results in ruining their career. They
easily
tend to lose confidence when they face failures as they are in deception that everything they touch, will turn into victory
because
of their looks. It is the adult's duty to
make
aware of those illusions of a toddler in early period or else this might create a gloomy impact on
offsprings
.

In conclusion
, one can accomplish a greater foot by committing themselves to a goal through meticulous work and physical
appearances
have no impact on those
truimph
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Physical appearance may play an important role in many spheres of life: in the person’s success in school, in relationships with people, in the choice of a career path. Say whether you agree or disagree with it, and if you see it as a positive or negative factor. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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