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People’sshopping habits depend more on theagegroup they belong to than other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

People’sshopping habits depend more on theagegroup they belong to than other factors. v. 2
These days, purchasing style varies among people due to various factors such as age, needs and so on. People are divided in their opinion regarding whether shopping style depends on the age bracket and not other factors. I completely disagree with the notion. Undoubtedly, people go to shopping for different reasons irrespective of age group however, there are two main factors that contributes to shopping habits. Firstly, gender. To illustrate female wants and needs differs from their male counterpart and this could lead to their difference in how they shop. For instance, female have a flair for buying handbags, flashy clothes and so on where, men shop for wristwatches, canvases and jeans. By and large, gender is a major reason for different purchasing norms. Secondly, another main cause is socio-economic status of the consumer. To make clear on this, the ' high' class person go for known brands. They do not go for unbranded products however, main brands are expensive so not every one can afford such a luxury. To exemplify, in the pharmaceutical sector, pfizer and gsk drugs are considered to be high-end drugs and are expensive therefore, not all patient or patients relative can afford it. On the whole, the socio-economic cause also affect people buying habits. In conclusion, humans shopping habits does not only depend on the age group. In addition, several factors such as gender and socio-economic reason of the people also contributes to one' s way of buying things.
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people
due to various
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factors
such as
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age
,
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needs
and
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on.
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are divided
in their opinion regarding whether
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shopping
style depends on the
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age
bracket and not other
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factors
. I completely disagree with the notion.

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,
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people
go to
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shopping
for
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different
reasons irrespective of
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age
group
however
, there are two main
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factors
that contributes to
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shopping
habits.
Firstly
, gender. To illustrate female wants and needs differs from their male counterpart and this could lead to their difference in how they shop.
For instance
, female have a flair for buying handbags, flashy clothes and
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so
on where,
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men
shop for wristwatches, canvases and jeans. By and large, gender is a major reason for
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different
purchasing norms.

Secondly
, another main cause is
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socio-economic
status of the consumer. To
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person go for known brands. They do not go for unbranded products
however
, main brands are expensive
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so
not every one can afford such a luxury. To exemplify, in the pharmaceutical sector,
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pfizer
and
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gsk
drugs
are considered
to be high-
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drugs and are expensive
therefore
, not all patient or patients relative can afford it.
On the whole
, the
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socio-economic
cause
also
affect
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people
buying habits.

In conclusion
, humans
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shopping
habits does not
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only
depend on the
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age
group.
In addition
, several
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factors
such as gender and
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socio-economic
reason of the
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people
also
contributes to
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14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay People’sshopping habits depend more on theagegroup they belong to than other factors. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
244 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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