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People think that the news media has influenced people s lives nowadays and it is a negative development To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

People think that the news media has influenced people s lives nowadays and it is a negative development v. 1
A lot of people are purchasing what they required on the web and more and more individuals prefer to buy online rather than by going to stores. On the one hand, there are many advantages of online shopping. First and foremost, it can save a lot of time that people spend on shopping. If a person does not have time to travel to the shopping malls or does not have any idea where to get products, he/she also can search and order products online from home easily. For example, if people want to get local products from one side to another side of countries such as tea or traditional cloths, they can be able to purchase through the internet. On the other hand, there also are some drawbacks from this trend. Firstly shopper is able to touch the product quality and online shops are cannot be able to show the quality, it can various duplicated products are distributed. For instance, some products such as shoes, mobile phones, clothes, etc. Therefore, many online shopper lack behind in services. Although, in shipping the product from factory to customer and defect product during exchanges the products and very hard to get refunds back. In conclusion, even though online shopping provides many benefits which can attribute to less time consuming and convenience, this method also has some drawbacks to customers such as lacking personal checking products and poor services.
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people
are purchasing what they required on the web and more and more individuals prefer to
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buy
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online
rather
than by going to stores.

On the one hand, there are
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many
advantages of
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online
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shopping
.
First
and foremost, it can save
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a lot of
time that
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people
spend on
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shopping
. If a person does not have time to travel to the
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shopping
malls or does not have any
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idea
where to
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get
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products
, he/she
also
can search and order
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products
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online
from home
easily
.
For example
, if
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people
want to
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get
local
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products
from one side to another side of countries such as tea or traditional cloths, they can be able to
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purchase
through the internet.

On the other hand
, there
also
are
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some
drawbacks from this trend.
Firstly
shopper is able to touch the
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product
quality and
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online
shops are cannot be able to
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show
the quality, it
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can various
duplicated
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products
are distributed
.
For instance
,
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some
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products
such as shoes, mobile phones, clothes, etc.
Therefore
,
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many
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online
shopper lack behind in services. Although, in shipping the
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product
from factory to customer and defect
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product
during exchanges the
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products
and
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very
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hard
to
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get
refunds back.

In conclusion
,
even though
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online
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shopping
provides
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many
benefits which can attribute to less
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time consuming
and convenience, this method
also
has
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some
drawbacks to customers such as lacking personal checking
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products
and poor services.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay People think that the news media has influenced people s lives nowadays and it is a negative development v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
235 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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