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People think that countries should produce foods that their population eats and import less food as much as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The charge for every public place is becoming mandatory. It is widely believed that entry fee for museum is good idea, even-though some does not collect. I admit that positives are out weighted negatives. Firstly, the entry fee will be beneficial for the development of museum. One of the remarkable reasons for this view is that the money helps for the further improvements of museum which is done by association. The maintenance will be increased. Moreover, the staff gets the salaries from entry fee only. We all need safety measurements and the precautions for protecting old monuments, whereas, we prefer for security like cameras and watchman which requires money. For example, 90% of museum developments and facilities provide are depended on admission charges which is proved by great reported Banda Abhinav. Secondly, the basic charge also stops un-wanted visitors who just visit for time pass, as well as, cut the people who want create museum has a park. This is the way which the disturbances might be reduced. Moreover, indirectly it encourages the children’s and researches to visit constantly so that they enjoy the museum atmosphere, conditions, and environment very greatly without having no problems. For instance, Germany is the country which collects amount just to keep the original visitors happy and support them with great atmosphere. In the same vein, free places are less clean and does not take care their cleanness while compare to paid places. Therefore, persuaded by all the discussion till now as well as, driven by my personal experiences, I would like to say that collecting entry charges are very good idea and there are plenty of advantages over dis advantages. The process should be continued so that public will be benefited.
The
charge
for every public place is becoming mandatory. It is
widely
believed that
entry
fee for
museum
is
good
idea
, even-though
some
does not collect. I admit that positives are out weighted negatives.

Firstly
, the
entry
fee will be beneficial for the development of
museum
. One of the remarkable reasons for this view is that the money
helps
for the
further
improvements of
museum
which
is done
by association. The maintenance will
be increased
.
Moreover
, the staff
gets
the salaries from
entry
fee
only
. We all need safety measurements and the precautions for protecting
old
monuments, whereas, we prefer for security like cameras and watchman which requires money.
For example
, 90% of
museum
developments and facilities provide
are depended
on admission
charges
which
is proved
by great reported
Banda
Abhinav.

Secondly
, the basic
charge
also
stops un-wanted
visitors who
just
visit for time pass,
as well
as,
cut
the
people
who
want create
museum
has a park. This is the way which the disturbances might be
reduced
.
Moreover
,
indirectly
it encourages the children’s and researches to visit
constantly
so
that they enjoy the
museum
atmosphere, conditions, and environment
very
greatly
without having no problems.
For instance
, Germany is the country which collects amount
just
to
keep
the original visitors happy and support them with great atmosphere.

In the same vein, free places are less clean and does not take care their cleanness while compare to paid places.

Therefore
, persuaded by all the discussion till
now
as well
as, driven by my personal experiences, I would like to say that collecting
entry
charges
are
very
good
idea
and there are
plenty
of advantages over
dis
advantages. The process should
be continued
so
that public will
be benefited
.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and import food as little as possible.

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