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People think that countries should produce foods that their population eats and import less food as much as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Food is an essential source for all living beings. It is widely believed that all types of food materials should be cultivated in our nation by which the importing will be reduced. I admit that I will completely agree with the given statement. Firstly, all varieties of eating essentials should be grown in our nation. One of the main reasons why this view is held is that cost of the food materials will be dramatically decreased. Whereas, there will be no compromise in the quality, quantity, and taste. Moreover, the mixing of various chemicals and liquids will be minimized by which we can store food materials for a long period. As a result, we can start exporting food by which it can be help in rising our country economy. For example, while exporting various food materials Bangladesh is the country that is earning 12% of the total economy. Secondly, importing should be reduced so that, consequently it helps our farmers to produce all types of food materials. Whereas, it also develops our infrastructure. Money spent on importing can be utilized for something other developments by which we can raise our chin. According to the reports we are the country which spends almost 45% of our money for importing that can be stopped. For instance, Spain is only the country that does not encourage importing and love to support their developments. Therefore, persuaded by all discussion till now as well as driven by my personal experiences, I would say that production should be escalated by which we can start exporting, as a result, we can stop importing and earn money.
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is an essential source for all living beings. It is
widely
believed that all types of
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food
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materials
should
be cultivated
in our nation by which the
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importing
will be
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reduced
. I admit that I will completely
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agree
with the
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given
statement.

Firstly
, all varieties of eating essentials should
be grown
in our nation. One of the main reasons why this view
is held
is that cost of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
materials
will be
dramatically
decreased. Whereas, there will be no compromise in the quality, quantity, and taste.
Moreover
, the mixing of various chemicals and liquids will
be minimized
by which we can store
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food
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
materials
for a long period.
As a result
, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
exporting
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food
by which it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in rising our
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country
economy.
For example
, while exporting various
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food
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materials
Bangladesh is the
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country
that is
earning 12% of the total economy.

Secondly
,
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importing
should be
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reduced
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so
that,
consequently
it
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helps
our farmers to produce all types of
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food
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materials
.
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Whereas
, it
also
develops our infrastructure. Money spent on
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importing
can
be utilized
for something other developments by which we can raise our chin. According to the reports we are the
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country
which spends almost 45% of our money for
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importing
that can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
.
For instance
, Spain is
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only
the
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country
that does not encourage
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importing
and
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love
to support their developments.

Therefore
, persuaded by all discussion till
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
as well
as driven by my personal experiences, I would say that production should
be escalated
by which we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
exporting,
as a result
, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
importing
and earn money.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and import food as little as possible

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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