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People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. v.4

People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. v. 4
"Success is always a journey but not a destination". I feel that success cannot be a place but it is a part and journey of one's own life. The author of this topic says that people succeed in their lives only because of the hard work but not the luck. According to me, both will play vital roles in every individual person's life. In the below paragraphs I will justify how both are important to succeed. Firstly, I would like to say that without hard work even God will not help you out in coming over the things in life. So, one should work hard to earn anything. I say this because there are many people around the world who tasted success because of their immense hard work. It is a sheer illusion that one comes up in life without hard work. For instance, everyone knows about the president of America. He was born in a poor family in Kansas, his father somehow managed to send him to the school for education. Then he really worked hard and secured seats in Columbia University and then to his dedication, he completed his law from Harvard Law University with scholarships and stipends. Now I would like to put emphasis on the luck which is also a required one in success. One may be really hard working but if the place where he or she is residing is underdeveloped then it will be very difficult to achieve the feat. Not only that when we read the stories of great people, we can observe that, they had a coordinating family through which they succeeded, they are not lucky here. One such example is the legendary cricketer Sachin Tendulkar. He is a well-known cricketer in the world. He was such a lucky person that he not only had a very good coach and his parents' support but also got a chance to play international cricket at the age of 16, which I feel is terrific. He used to be busy with the cricket schedule and his wife use to take care of their children, so he is lucky enough to have all this. In the end, I would like to conclude by saying that it is a combination of both hard work and luck that makes a man successful in life in all respects. Having one without another is like a car without any fuel.
"
Success is always a journey
but
not a destination
"
. I feel that
success
cannot be a place
but
it is a part and journey of one's
own
life
. The author of this topic says that
people
succeed in their
lives
only
because
of the
hard
work
but
not the luck.
According to me
, both will play vital roles in every individual person's
life
. In the below paragraphs I will justify how both are
important
to succeed.

Firstly
, I would like to say that without
hard
work
even God will not
help
you out in coming over the things in
life
.
So
, one should
work
hard
to earn anything. I say this
because
there are
many
people
around the world who tasted
success
because
of their immense
hard
work
. It is a sheer illusion that one
comes
up in
life
without
hard
work
.
For instance
, everyone knows about the president of America. He
was born
in a poor family in Kansas, his father somehow managed to
send
him to the school for education. Then he
really
worked
hard
and secured seats in Columbia University and then to his dedication, he completed his law from Harvard Law University with scholarships and stipends.

Now
I would like to put emphasis on the luck which is
also
a required one in
success
. One may be
really
hard working
but
if the place where he or she is residing
is underdeveloped
then it will be
very
difficult to achieve the feat. Not
only
that when we read the stories of great
people
, we can observe that, they had a coordinating family through which they succeeded, they are not lucky here. One such example is the legendary cricketer
Sachin
Tendulkar
. He is a well-known cricketer in the world. He was such a lucky person that he not
only
had a
very
good
coach and his parents' support
but
also
got
a chance to play international cricket at the age of 16, which I feel is terrific.
He
used
to be busy with the cricket schedule and his wife
use to
take care of their children,
so
he is lucky
enough
to have all this.

In the
end
, I would like
to conclude
by saying that it is a combination of both
hard
work
and luck that
makes
a
man
successful in
life
in all respects. Having one without another is like a car without any fuel.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
400 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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