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People succeed because of their hard work, but some say it is something else that is significant for success. How far do you agree with this statement? Give some reasons from your personal knowledge or experience to support your stance? v.4

People succeed because of their hard work, but some say it is something else that is significant for success. How far Give some reasons from your personal knowledge or experience to support your stance? v. 4
In this age of cut throat competition, success is key to experience luxurious life style. Whether hard work opens the gate of success or not has sparked a heated debate. In this essay, I would like to incline by the statement that hard work wins the success. multifarious points stand up to shore my point of view. First and foremost, It is said that " luck is lift and hark work is stair" , to be specific, hard work guarantee you the success where as luck does not come with definite guarantee. For example, Anil ambani, the very famous business man of india had nothing when he started his business. He relied on hard work and hard work made it possible for him to be counted among the richest personalities of the universe. Further emphasising on my point of view, all the example of famous personalities of world earned their success with hard work. They never trusted anything else except working hard, so there are hard proves available to find out how hard work take you to the heights of success. Adding to it, when you work hard for any particular goal, only then you can maximize your joy of reaching that goal, success in gift has no excitement By contrary, Others has conflicting views. According to them, hard work is just another meaning of wasting time, Where as other factor like as luck and being known of famous personalities plays paramount role to take you to success. For example, Wasim jaffer, A very skill full domestic player and known as artists of wrist work, worked hard but could not make to Indian national team. Where as, Ravi gavaskar, The son of former indian cricket captain, made his way to national team like a cake walk just because of being a son of famous cricketer To recapitulate, Even though luck contribute in success somewhat, but there is no synonymous of hard work to get to definite success
In this age of
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cut throat
competition,
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success
is key to experience luxurious life style. Whether
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hard
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work
opens the gate of
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success
or not has sparked a heated debate. In this essay, I would like to incline by the statement that
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hard
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work
wins the success.

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multifarious
points stand up to shore my point of view.
First
and foremost, It
is said
that
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; luck is lift and hark
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work
is
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stair&quot
;
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,
to be specific,
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hard
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work
guarantee you the
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success
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where as
luck does not
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come
with
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definite
guarantee.
For example
, Anil
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ambani
, the
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very
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famous
business
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man
of
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india
had nothing when he
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started
his business. He relied on
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hard
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work
and
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hard
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work
made it possible for him to
be counted
among the richest personalities of the universe.

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Further
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emphasising
on my point of view, all the example of
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famous
personalities of world earned their
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success
with
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hard
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work
. They never trusted anything else except working
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hard
,
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so
there are
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hard
proves available to find out how
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hard
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work
take you to the heights of
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success
. Adding to it, when you
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work
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hard
for any particular goal,
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only
then you can maximize your joy of reaching that goal,
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success
in gift has no
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excitement


By contrary, Others has conflicting views. According to them,
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hard
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work
is
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just
another meaning of wasting time,
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Where as
other factor like as luck and
being known
of
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famous
personalities plays paramount role to take you to
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success
.
For example
,
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Wasim
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jaffer
, A
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very
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skill
full domestic player and known as artists of wrist
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work
, worked
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hard
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but
could not
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make
to Indian national team.
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Where as
, Ravi
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gavaskar
, The son of former
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indian
cricket captain, made his way to national team like a cake walk
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just
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because
of being a son of
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famous
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cricketer


To recapitulate,
Even though
luck contribute in
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success
somewhat,
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but
there is no synonymous of
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hard
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work
to
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get
to
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definite
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success
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Mistakes

IELTS essay People succeed because of their hard work, but some say it is something else that is significant for success. How far Give some reasons from your personal knowledge or experience to support your stance? v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
326 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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