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People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effects does it have on an individual and on society? v.20

People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effects does it have on an individual and on society? v. 20
An average person needs atleast 8 hours of sleep daily to feel refreshed. The number of hours people our sleeping has reduced in many countries due to work pressure and with constant use of social media because of this individual’s health and overall societies well being has been negatively effected. This essay will discuss why people are sleeping less than before and it’s effects on them and the society as well. People nowdays have poor work-life balance and our glued to social media applications. The working environment is more competitive than before with higher targets set every quarter to achieve, moreover everyone is constantly checking and refreshing for new updates as they have a fear of missing out on new information. For instance, an average user spends around 6 hours daily on social media and is ready to sacrifice their sleep for it. This has lead to the whole society being sleep deprived and feeling tired. Sleep deprivation has lead to serious effects on the health of the society and individuals. Due to lack of sleep people have suffered from illness such as high blood pressure and depression, for example: a recent study revealed that 70% of people suffering from depression sleep less than 6 hours a day. Overall the society is also getting effected as their has been an increase in the number of road accidents because of fatigue. Thus, sleeping less than what is needed by the body can disturb the balance of the society. In conclusion, people are sleeping less than needed in many countries because of no work-life balance and addiction to social media. This has not just effected the health of the individuals negatively but the society as a whole.
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daily to feel refreshed. The number of
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people
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reduced
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countries due to work pressure and with constant
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use
of
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social
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because of this
individual’s health and
overall
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societies
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well being
has been
negatively
effected. This essay will discuss why
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before
and it’s effects on them and the
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nowdays
have poor work-life balance and our glued to
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social
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applications. The working environment is more competitive than
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before
with higher targets set every quarter to achieve,
moreover
everyone is
constantly
checking and refreshing for new updates as they have a fear of missing out on new information.
For instance
, an average user spends around 6
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hours
daily on
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social
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media
and is ready to sacrifice their
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sleep
for it. This has lead to the whole
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society
being
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deprived and feeling tired.

Sleep deprivation has lead to serious effects on the health of the
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society
and individuals. Due to lack of
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sleep
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people
have suffered from illness such as high blood pressure and depression,
for example
: a recent study revealed that 70% of
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people
suffering from depression
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sleep
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less
than 6
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hours
a day.
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society
is
also
getting effected as their has been an increase in the number of road accidents
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because
of fatigue.
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,
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sleeping
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less
than what
is needed
by the body can disturb the balance of the society.

In conclusion
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less
than needed in
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many
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of no work-life balance and addiction to
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social
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media
. This has not
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effected the health of the individuals
negatively
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the
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society
as a whole.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effects does it have on an individual and on society? v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.5
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