I think it is a negative development that young people continue to admire these media and sports stars in spite of their negative influence. In my essay, I will outline some of the dangerous impact it has.
A lot of young people look up to these athletes and entertainment celebrities as role models because of their enormous wealth and their success over time and they tend to copy every aspect of their lives into theirs. The problem is, they don't see behind the fame and all the failures these stars have been through that have made them a success. The ignorance has made a lot of young people made the wrong decision by trying to get rich and famous quickly, which mostly end in a life of misery for the person and their parent or guardian.
Admiring a popular figure who is a negative example is terrible for society as a whole. The effects can lead to a higher figure in crime rate, great depression, substance abuse, increased high school dropout rate, increase in unqualified citizens to perform well in available jobs, thereby leading to a high unemployment and a shortage of talent at the same time. When these younger ones start going astray a lot of things can go wrong if nothing is done to stop it.
In conclusion, we need to control how much negative influence we let out from the media and prepare younger people to be able to recognize the negative influence and how they can slowly lead them on to a path they may not be prepared for.
I
think
it is a
negative
development that young
people
continue to admire these media and sports stars
in spite of
their
negative
influence. In my essay, I will outline
some of the
dangerous
impact it has.
A lot of
young
people
look up to these athletes and entertainment celebrities as role models
because
of their enormous wealth and their success over
time and
they tend to copy every aspect of their
lives
into theirs. The problem is, they don't
see
behind the fame and all the failures these stars have been through that have made them a success. The ignorance has made
a lot of
young
people
made the
wrong
decision by trying to
get
rich and
famous
quickly
, which
mostly
end
in a life of misery for the person and their parent or guardian.
Admiring a popular figure who is a
negative
example is terrible for society as a whole. The effects can lead to a higher figure in crime rate, great depression, substance abuse, increased high school dropout rate, increase in unqualified citizens to perform well in available jobs, thereby leading to a high unemployment and a shortage of talent at the same time. When these younger ones
start
going astray
a lot of
things can go
wrong
if nothing
is done
to
stop
it.
In conclusion
, we need to control how much
negative
influence we
let
out from the media and prepare younger
people
to be able to recognize the
negative
influence and how they can
slowly
lead them on to a path they may not
be prepared
for.
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