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People should spend less money on unnecessary things and save more for the future. How much do you agree with this opinion and why? v.1

People should spend less money on unnecessary things and save more for the future. How much do you agree with this opinion and why? v. 1
It is often considered by some that, money savings are good practice when compared to spending now and then. However, in my opinion, excessive spending's for unnecessary things make the situation worse not only in the future but also present. At once, money-saving behaviour would likely to have prosperous life now and in the forthcoming years and probably for the next generations. To begin with, it is good to have some money for future usage or the unexpected crisis in day to day life. In brief, people who had the interest to save money may help them to cope with the stressful situations in life like emergency medical care, retired life usages, and for the sake of children. Moreover, saving money in terms of insurance, health policies, would help people to be more relaxed and volatile free life to arise a dilemma in the future. Saving money may help the investors get interested in the saved money that would be more beneficial and helpful to some extent. For instance, retired couples explain that their daily needs may be fulfilled by the interest which they got from the fixed saving deposits of one bank. On the other hand, people who spend huge amounts of money for daily needs and enjoyments would have a deleterious impact on their life. In other words, even the future life is not predictable, many people suffering from the financial dilemma in some stages of life. Shopping craze and spending money for unsound lifestyle may lead fail to joint the two edges of life in later life. For instance, many students would have struggled to study materials and resources by the reckless expenditure of their parents. It is a true phenomenon that, people who lived a life irrespective of saved money would face many challenges in the future by the influence of global financial crisis or inflation. To sum up, some daily spending is essential, nevertheless, lack of saving may lead to a detrimental effect on the near life. Thereby, it is better to have some earnings to be saved in a secured area an that would help the people to surpass crisis and overcome the issues independently.
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considered by
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that,
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money
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practice when compared to spending
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and then.
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, in my opinion, excessive spending's for unnecessary things
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make
the situation worse not
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future
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also
present. At once, money-saving
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behaviour
would likely to have prosperous
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life
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now
and in the forthcoming years and
probably
for the
next
generations.

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with, it is
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good
to have
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some
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money
for
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future
usage or the unexpected crisis in day to day
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life
.
In brief
,
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people
who had the interest to save
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money
may
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help
them to cope with the stressful situations in
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life
like emergency medical care, retired
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life
usages, and for the sake of children.
Moreover
,
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saving
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money
in terms of insurance, health policies, would
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help
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people
to be more relaxed and volatile free
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life
to arise a dilemma in the
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future
.
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Saving
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money
may
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help
the investors
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get
interested in the saved
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money
that would be more beneficial and helpful to
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some
extent.
For instance
, retired couples
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explain
that their daily needs may
be fulfilled
by the interest which they
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got
from the
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fixed
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saving
deposits of one bank.

On the other hand
,
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people
who spend huge amounts of
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money
for daily needs and enjoyments would have a deleterious impact on their
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life
.
In other words
, even the
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future
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life
is not predictable,
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many
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people
suffering from the financial dilemma in
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some
stages of
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life
. Shopping craze and spending
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money
for unsound lifestyle may lead fail to joint the two edges of
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life
in later
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life
.
For instance
,
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many
students would have struggled to study materials and resources by the reckless expenditure of their parents. It is a true phenomenon that,
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people
who
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lived
a
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life
irrespective of saved
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money
would face
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many
challenges in the
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future
by the influence of global financial crisis or inflation.

To sum up,
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some
daily spending is essential,
nevertheless
, lack of
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saving
may lead to a detrimental effect on the near
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life
. Thereby, it is better to have
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some
earnings to
be saved
in a secured area
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an that
would
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help
the
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people
to surpass crisis and overcome the issues
independently
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay People should spend less money on unnecessary things and save more for the future. How much do you agree with this opinion and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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