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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.51

: Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 51
There is no doubt that, travelling has now become a trend among the masses, and most of the individuals are going for an excursion at an increased rate. There are several reasons for this, such as the growth in the transport facilities and the technological advancement. This will have enormous advantages for travellers such as exploring themselves and the beauty lying in the lap of the nature. To begin with, there are many causes of planning more excursions nowadays; the foremost reason is the improvement in the technology. Due to this rapid development, the connectivity has leaped many times and makes it easy for many to commute from one end to another. For instance, it is believed that, access to even the remotest areas has been possible by an efficient network of railways and airways that have demanded the travellers to travel more. Secondly, the globalisation has led to the tremendous growth in the tourism sector and people are more likely to visit the places which are easily paved due to the progress in the tourism in many states and the countries. Therefore, more individuals like to travel than they used to do in the past. Furthermore, the positive effects by such vogue cannot be denied by the backpackers. While commuting to many places the people explore the beauty of the nature and have an indelible effect on their mind; even after coming from those scenic terrains. Moreover, the people who commute more can show the highest rate of productivity in the work. As, when they are away from their work they relax their minds from the hectic work schedule and rejuvenates their soul and regain the energy for later working days. For an illustration, the statistics by the World Health Organisation shows that, the people who visit to the places of their own choice shows double productivity in offices. Hence, one should enjoy and visit the places of their interest and explore themselves. To conclude, there are many reasons to travel more nowadays such as globalisation, growth in technology and due to this the masses are getting a chance to explore their inner being and calm their mind and soul.
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become a trend among the masses, and most of the individuals are going for an excursion at an increased rate. There are several reasons for this, such as the growth in the transport facilities and the technological advancement. This will have enormous advantages for
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such as exploring themselves and the beauty lying in the lap of the nature.

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with, there are
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causes of planning more excursions nowadays; the foremost reason is the improvement in the technology. Due to this rapid development, the connectivity has leaped
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times and
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it easy for
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to commute from one
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to another.
For instance
, it
is believed
that, access to even the remotest areas has been possible by an efficient network of railways and airways that have demanded the
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travellers
to travel more.
Secondly
, the
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globalisation
has led to the tremendous growth in the tourism sector and
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people
are more likely to visit the
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places
which are
easily
paved due to the progress in the tourism in
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many
states and the countries.
Therefore
, more individuals like to travel than they
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used
to do in the past.

Furthermore
, the
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positive
effects by such vogue cannot
be denied
by the backpackers. While commuting to
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many
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places
the
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people
explore the beauty of the nature and have an indelible effect on their mind; even after coming from those scenic terrains.
Moreover
, the
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people
who commute more can
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show
the highest rate of productivity in the work. As, when they are away from their work they relax their minds from the hectic work schedule and rejuvenates their soul and regain the energy for later working days. For an illustration, the statistics by the World Health
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Organisation
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shows
that, the
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people
who visit to the
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places
of their
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own
choice
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shows
double productivity in offices.
Hence
, one should enjoy and visit the
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places
of their interest and explore themselves.

To conclude
, there are
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many
reasons to travel more nowadays such as
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globalisation
, growth in technology and due to this the masses are getting a chance to explore their inner being and calm their mind and soul.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay : Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 51

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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