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People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.5

People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest? v. 5
It is obvious that people are unwilling to make changes in their lives after being accustomed to a certain style of life. However, these resistances against changes might face some severe problems and some solutions need to be done to minimize these predicaments to some extent. First, unchangeable life could hinder our self-development in some ways. In other words, those who always stay in a comfort zone instead of taking new, risky things in their lives might lose the chance to nurture their own growth. For instance, some people refuse to go abroad because of their " unsecured fears”; apparently, they might be afraid of “culture shock” or they simply satisfy their old life in their own country. Consequently, people might lose out on opportunities to broaden their horizons as well as challenge themselves. Second, different generations in a family might have bitter experiences in their relationship if they always resist all changes in their lives, especially for the old people. We all know that the viewpoint of one generation is in some way incompatible with that of the other generation, and so conflicts between them are seemingly inevitable. Therefore, if people do not learn how to accept a new way of thinking or have a flexible state of mind, their relationships could become worse. Likewise, any problem has its answer, these predicaments can be unsolved. For individuals, the option is to be braver enough to welcome their own opportunities. For society, people should be encouraged to spend much more time together. Furthermore, a good idea is for everyone to change their minds for the betterment of our society. In conclusion, it is essential for people to make careful decisions towards changes in their lives but we should not completely ignore the possibilities of a radical life bringing to us.
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people
are unwilling to
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make
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changes
in their
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lives
after
being accustomed
to a certain style of
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life
.
However
, these resistances against
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changes
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might
face
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some
severe problems and
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some
solutions need to
be done
to minimize these predicaments to
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some
extent.

First
, unchangeable
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life
could hinder our self-development in
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some
ways.
In other words
, those who always stay in a comfort zone
instead
of taking new, risky things in their
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lives
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might
lose the chance to nurture their
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own
growth.
For instance
,
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some
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people
refuse to go abroad
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because
of their
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; unsecured fears”;
apparently
, they
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might
be afraid of “culture shock” or they
simply
satisfy their
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old
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life
in their
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own
country.
Consequently
,
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people
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might
lose out on opportunities to broaden their horizons
as well
as challenge themselves.

Second,
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different
generations in a family
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might
have bitter experiences in their relationship if they always resist all
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changes
in their
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lives
,
especially
for the
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old
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people
. We all know that the viewpoint of one generation is in
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some
way incompatible with that of the other generation, and
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so
conflicts between them are
seemingly
inevitable.
Therefore
, if
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people
do not learn how to accept a new way of thinking or have a flexible state of mind, their relationships could become worse.

Likewise
, any problem has its answer, these predicaments can
be unsolved
. For individuals, the option is to be braver
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enough
to welcome their
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own
opportunities. For society,
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people
should
be encouraged
to spend much more time together.
Furthermore
, a
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good
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idea
is for everyone to
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change
their minds for the betterment of our society.

In conclusion
, it is essential for
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people
to
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make
careful decisions towards
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changes
in their
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lives
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but
we should not completely
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ignore
the possibilities of a radical
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life
bringing to us.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
300 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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