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People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest? v.4

People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest? v. 4
Due to the natural reasons, people find it difficult to change the ways they live. It is quite difficult for a majority of people to alter the state of mind, the way they think and the environment they get used to. Therefore several problems can occur when they are told to do and solve their issues in easier and more decent ways. In my opinion, obvious solutions knock the door of psychologists and also family members and relatives should act in these positions. Changes in some cases are inevitable and embracing the new idea and way of life bring many opportunities and hence accepting new things are often not options, but mandatory for us. In modern life, people adjust to different habits and routines and then they do not tend to get involved to change their usual activities. By doing this, they decline any other offer presented by surroundings, especially when these offers are from ones that they do not like. Because of that their resistance increases in not changing. For example, when a parent asked their kid to not do disobedience or not eat chocolate too much, this kid's persistence in the matter sometimes enhances as far as parents ask. That's why the worst and most difficult of the problem is the resistance of children's unruly behaviour. If these issues are not undertaken by someone responsible and coped with the problem, its consequences stay to the rest of child's life vitally. New ideas, technology and changes are often for better ways of life. Not being able to grip the new idea and changes can bring personal and social problems. Parents who cannot embrace the idea of modernization and generation gaps often have bitter experience with their children. Changes in society are also natural with time and the old way life will not remain forever. New ideas often come to people with open and broader perspective. Old traditions have their importance but new customs, ideas and changes should also be accepted for the overall betterment of the society. A healthy family and social relationship, use of technology, guidance and mutual understanding people of different generations can minimise this problem to a great extent. It is natural that old people will not easily accept the radical changes of ideas, values and way of life. New generations should talk to them, discuss them and present the good sides of the changes they have accepted. To conclude, it is best to consult these overwhelming behaviours to an expert for the sake of the welfare of both the people and the society. By the help of modern psychology I do not think of a problem unsolved, and besides this is a crucial problem for a society that comprised of healthy-thinking people.
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change
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ways
they
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live
. It is quite difficult for a majority of
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people
to alter the state of mind, the
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way
they
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think
and the environment they
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get
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used
to.
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Therefore
several
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problems
can occur when they are
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told
to do and solve their issues in easier and more decent
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ways
. In my opinion, obvious solutions knock the door of psychologists and
also
family members and relatives should act in these positions.
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Changes
in
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some
cases are inevitable and embracing the
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new
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idea
and
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way
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life
bring
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opportunities and
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accepting
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things are
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not options,
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mandatory for us.

In modern
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life
,
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people
adjust to
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habits and
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routines and
then they do not tend to
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get
involved to
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change
their usual activities. By doing this, they decline any other offer presented by surroundings,
especially
when these offers are from ones that they do not like.
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Because
of that their resistance increases in not changing.
For example
, when a parent asked their kid to not do disobedience or not eat chocolate too much, this kid's persistence in the matter
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sometimes
enhances as far as parents ask. That's why the worst and most difficult of the
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problem
is the resistance of children's
unruly
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behaviour
. If these issues are not undertaken by someone responsible and coped with the
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problem
, its consequences stay to the rest of child's
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life
vitally
.

New
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ideas
, technology and
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changes
are
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often
for better
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ways
of
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life
. Not being able to grip the
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new
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idea
and
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changes
can bring personal and social
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problems
. Parents who cannot embrace the
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idea
of modernization and generation gaps
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often
have bitter experience with their children.
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Changes
in society are
also
natural with time and the
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old
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way
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life
will not remain forever.
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New
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ideas
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often
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come
to
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people
with open and broader perspective.
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Old
traditions have their importance
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but
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new
customs,
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ideas
and
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changes
should
also
be
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accepted
for the
overall
betterment of the society.

A healthy family and social relationship,
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use
of technology, guidance and mutual understanding
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people
of
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different
generations can
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minimise
this
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problem
to a great extent. It is natural that
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old
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people
will not
easily
accept the radical
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changes
of
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ideas
, values and
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way
of
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life
.
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New
generations should talk to them, discuss them and present the
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good
sides of the
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changes
they have
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accepted
.

To conclude
, it is best to consult these overwhelming
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behaviours
to an expert for the sake of the welfare of both the
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people
and the society. By the
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help
of modern psychology I do not
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think
of a
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problem
unsolved, and
besides
this is a crucial
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problem
for a society that comprised of healthy-thinking
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people
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
54Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest? v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
457 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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