Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life What are these problems Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns v.1

People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life What are these problems Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns v. 1
Funding for education is becoming an important discussion among policy makers across the world. Some think that all education from kinder garden to graduate level studies in the university should be made free, by government funding the cost of the studies. I strongly agree with this and in this essay we will highlight the reasons. Some argue that the government has other critical areas to budget and manage. These include health care for citizens, housing and transport infrastructure for the country's development. In addition, Increasing population and aging people demand more health care services and infrastructure expenses, forcing more funds to be allocated. For example, the Indian government's annual budget allocates 30% of the money to the health care sector in the year 2018. As a result, Priority for the education funding is lowered due to expenses in other sectors. However, government paying for the education would provide the same standard and quality of education for all of its population irrespective of the social standards of the individual. Since education is free, people from all economic backgrounds will be able to afford and pursue it. Subsequently improving the standard of living and employment opportunity. Which in turn increasing the tax revenue for the government. As highly educated individuals earn more through employment or creating new businesses. For example, government funded education in Singapore has shown a significant increase in the education standard and knowledge of students, increasing the countries GDP by 2% every year. In conclusion, I completely agree that the government should pay for the education. As this provides the same level and quality of education to all of its people, making it affordable. This also improves the country’s literacy rate helping the growth and development of the country overall.
Funding for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
is becoming an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
discussion among
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
policy makers
across the world.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
from kinder garden to graduate level studies in the university should
be made
free, by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
funding the cost of the studies. I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this and in this essay we will highlight the reasons.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
argue that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
has other critical areas to budget and manage. These include health care for citizens, housing and transport infrastructure for the country's development.
In addition
, Increasing population and aging
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
demand more health care services and infrastructure expenses, forcing more funds to
be allocated
.
For example
, the Indian
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
's annual budget allocates 30% of the money to the health care sector in the year 2018.
As a result
, Priority for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
funding
is lowered
due to expenses in other sectors.

However
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
paying for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
would provide the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
standard
and quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
for all of its population irrespective of the social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
standards
of the individual. Since
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
is free,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
from all economic backgrounds will be able to afford and pursue it.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Subsequently
improving the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
standard
of living and employment opportunity. Which in turn increasing the tax revenue for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
. As
highly
educated individuals earn more through employment or creating new businesses.
For example
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
funded
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
in Singapore has shown a significant increase in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
standard
and knowledge of students, increasing the countries GDP by 2% every year.

In conclusion
, I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should pay for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
. As this provides the same level and quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
to all of its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, making it affordable. This
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improves
the country’s literacy rate helping the growth and development of the country
overall
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
Roger Ascham

IELTS essay People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life What are these problems Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts