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People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns? v.3

People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns? v. 3
Mega cities where myriads of people are living so that they are confronted with lots of disadvantages. A number of issues have been arisen for the over population in huge cities. For that reason, governments should motivate people to leave the biggest region for staying in small towns. To begin with, larger cities have a couple of problems which affect the life of a human being. First and foremost problem is pollution, which begets the high volume of vehicles. As the growing number of people are residing in cities, it is important to have various types of transportation. However, these transits spread black smoke in air, which is contaminated, resulting different types of respiratory diseases such as lung cancer. Moreover, governments have to supply extra houses for the increased population who might dwell in open spaces or slums, if the authority does not provide good housing facility in astronomical cities. It has been an urgent issue for the government who needs to solve the above problems by transferring people from the mega city to countryside. The reason is that if people start to stay in the suburb area, they will not face the problem of pollution. Besides that, people do not need to live in a congested area like larger cities. Although they will not get any modern facilities after being the residents of a small town, the life of people would become convenient and easy to the touch of nature. For example, the people would be able to grow crops easily and eat healthy food, eventually, this would help them to live healthier lives. In conclusion, living in the big city, people may face plenty with problems such as pollutants in air resulting health hassles and housing issue. That is why, the leader of the country should inspire its citizens to live in the peripheral area of the city which might succour to reduce vehicles from mega city which would be smoke free. In addition, connecting with the nature of the small town would make life easier.
Mega
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cities
where myriads of
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people
are living
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so
that they
are confronted
with lots of disadvantages. A number of issues have
been arisen
for the over population in huge
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cities
. For that reason,
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governments
should motivate
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people
to
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leave
the biggest region for staying in
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small
towns.

To
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begin
with, larger
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cities
have a couple of
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problems
which affect the life of a human being.
First
and foremost
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problem
is pollution, which begets the high volume of vehicles. As the growing number of
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people
are residing in
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cities
, it is
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important
to have various types of transportation.
However
, these transits spread black smoke in air, which
is contaminated
, resulting
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different
types of respiratory diseases such as lung cancer.
Moreover
,
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governments
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have to
supply extra
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houses
for the increased population who might dwell in open spaces or slums, if the authority does not provide
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good
housing facility in astronomical cities.

It has been an urgent issue for the
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government
who needs to solve the above
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problems
by transferring
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people
from the mega city to countryside. The reason is that if
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people
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start
to stay in the suburb area, they will not face the
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problem
of pollution.
Besides
that,
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people
do not need to
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live
in a congested area like larger
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cities
. Although they will not
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get
any modern facilities after being the residents of a
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small
town, the life of
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people
would become convenient and easy to the touch of nature.
For example
, the
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people
would be able to grow crops
easily
and eat healthy food,
eventually
, this would
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help
them to
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live
healthier
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lives
.

In conclusion
, living in the
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big
city,
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people
may face
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plenty
with
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problems
such as pollutants in air resulting health hassles and housing issue.
That is
why, the leader of the country should inspire its citizens to
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live
in the peripheral area of the city which might
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succour
to
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reduce
vehicles from mega city which would be smoke free.
In addition
, connecting with the nature of the
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small
town would
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make
life easier.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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