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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? v.6

People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? v. 6
Nowadays living in a big city has become a significant issue; indeed, there are numerous problems to face for city dwellers, two of which are very relevant for people’s physical and mental health: the air and noise pollution and the increased risk of stress. For this reason, I believe government should promote the transfer to suburbia and small towns. It has been argued that large cities have more services as well as work and leisure possibilities than small cities and this is the main reason why they are prone to overpopulation, which causes an increase in noise pollution. In addition, population growth creates car traffic, which expand air pollution. This increase of air and noise pollution is dangerous to people’s health. For example, a medical paper showed that the incidence of cancer is higher for people living in large cities. Moreover, it is clear that hectic places such as metropolis generate a more stressful life than that in regional towns, sometimes leading to psychological diseases such as pathological anxiety or depression. For instance, it has been demonstrated that the rate of people suffering from anxiety is higher for those living in a big city. Consequently, the government should encourage people to move to regional towns to avoid overpopulation and problems derived from it. To conclude, this essay explained problems related to a city life, such as air and noise pollution and stress generated by a hectic place. Modern lives are leading to different serious issues, hence it is a duty to preserve a quality life when it is possible.
Nowadays living in a
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big
city has become a significant issue;
indeed
, there are numerous problems to face for city dwellers, two of which are
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very
relevant for
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people’s
physical and mental health: the
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air
and
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noise
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pollution
and the increased
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risk
of
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stress
.
For this reason
, I believe
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government
should promote the transfer to suburbia and
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small
towns.

It has
been argued
that large
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cities
have more services
as well
as work and leisure possibilities than
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small
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cities
and this is the main reason why they are prone to overpopulation, which causes an increase in
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noise
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pollution
.
In addition
, population growth creates car traffic, which expand
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air
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pollution
. This increase of
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air
and
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noise
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pollution
is
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dangerous
to
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people’s
health.
For example
, a medical paper
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showed
that the incidence of cancer is higher for
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people
living in large cities.

Moreover
, it is
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clear
that hectic places such as metropolis generate a more stressful life than that in regional towns,
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sometimes
leading to psychological diseases such as pathological anxiety or depression.
For instance
, it has
been demonstrated
that the rate of
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people
suffering from anxiety is higher for those living in a
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big
city.

Consequently
, the
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government
should encourage
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people
to
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move
to regional towns to avoid overpopulation and problems derived from it.

To conclude
, this essay
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explained
problems related to a city life, such as
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air
and
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noise
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pollution
and
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stress
generated by a hectic place. Modern
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lives
are leading to
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different
serious issues,
hence
it is a duty to preserve a quality life when it is possible.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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