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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.21

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 21
In recent years, environmental problems have become one of the heated debate as well as changing in people’s lives and eco-friendly choices. If some people think that a single drop cannot create a lake, I strongly believe that it is the sum of our actions to make the difference. For this reason, if we change our habits the environmental conditions will improve. Therefore, I do not agree with those people who think that only the governments and large companies can do something, even though it is their primary duty to create the conditions to make different choices. Indeed, there are two important things that only people can do for the environment: recycling and taking eco-friendly choices. It is clear that the governments have to make laws about recycling and reduce the use of pollutants, but it is our duty too to be informed about the right way to recycle and change our pollutant behaviors. Newspapers reported that the rate of fines in a year regarding recycling is very high. In addition, our behavior influences others, leading to wrong or right acting. In fact, the governments cannot forbid the exaggerated use of cars, which provide the highest percentage of air pollution, thus, we should prefer helping the environment rather than fashion. Big companies are adopting materials to allow people buying eco-friendly products, but it is our responsibility to choose those ones. For example, it has known that many people choose to buy economical clothes, which contain micro-plastics that is one of the most polluting sources. To conclude, this essay disagrees with the statement below because it is people responsibility to help the environment and only governments and big companies cannot improve this condition if we do not make the right decisions.
In recent years, environmental problems have become one of the heated debate
as well
as changing in
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people’s
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lives
and eco-friendly choices. If
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some
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people
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think
that a single drop cannot create a lake, I
strongly
believe that it is the sum of our actions to
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make
the difference.
For this reason
, if we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
our habits the environmental conditions will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
.
Therefore
, I do not
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agree
with those
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people
who
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think
that
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only
the
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governments
and large
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companies
can do something,
even though
it is their primary duty to create the conditions to
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make
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different
choices.
Indeed
, there are two
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important
things that
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only
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people
can do for the environment: recycling and taking eco-friendly choices.

It is
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clear
that the
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governments
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have to
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make
laws about recycling and
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reduce
the
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use
of pollutants,
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but
it is our duty too to
be informed
about the right way to recycle and
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change
our pollutant behaviors. Newspapers reported that the rate of fines in a year regarding recycling is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
high.
In addition
, our behavior influences others, leading to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
or right acting. In fact, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
cannot forbid the exaggerated
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of cars, which provide the highest percentage of air pollution,
thus
, we should prefer helping the environment
rather
than fashion.

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Big
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companies
are adopting materials to
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allow
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people
buying eco-friendly products,
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but
it is our responsibility to choose
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those ones
.
For example
, it has known that
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many
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people
choose to
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buy
economical clothes, which contain micro-plastics
that is
one of the most polluting sources.

To conclude
, this essay disagrees with the statement below
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because
it is
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people
responsibility to
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help
the environment and
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only
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governments
and
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big
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companies
cannot
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improve
this condition if we do not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
the right decisions.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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