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people learn things better from those at their own level like friends than from teachers. agree or not v.2

people learn things better from those at their own level like friends than from teachers. agree or not v. 2
Learning is a process of requiring knowledge which demands time. It does not matter the source. It can be made through friends, teachers or even family members. Some people think that it is easier to learn from friends at own levels. However, others believe otherwise, that it is much better to get knowledge from teachers whose knowledge are higher from them. It is agreeable to say that we learn more with teachers than friends. Firstly, teachers have a higher level of education than our friend do. They have years of experience about many subjects and when good at teaching, they may convey the information in an easily way that everybody can fathom it. As an example, when in college I had difficulties in understanding maths. Then, a friend of mine told me about a math teacher nearby. I took his course and by the end of that year at college I overcame every other my classmates. My grades only kept going up afterwords. Secondly, teachers have been through life experience that our friends have not. Not only by studying through books but visiting in local did they get information. And, that it is one of the most important source of way to find it and to pass such information on that make them stronger than any friends. Because when we try something, we see it, we touch it, it is very different than just by covering books. However, there are some occasions where we can learn from friends. For instance, if we are in a study group preparing for a coming test, there are always some friends who know about a specific subject while others know another and so on. Then, we gather all the needed information and do our best in the test. Besides, we can corroborate with our friends. Maybe they may not know what we know and we change knowledge. Finally, teachers are our best tools to get knowledge from and they will be ready to help us with everything that we might need.
Learning is a process of requiring
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knowledge
which demands time. It does not matter the source. It can
be made
through
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friends
,
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teachers
or even family members.
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Some
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people
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think
that it is easier to learn from
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friends
at
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own
levels.
However
, others believe
otherwise
, that it is much better to
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get
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knowledge
from
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teachers
whose
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knowledge
are higher from them. It is agreeable to say that we learn more with
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teachers
than friends.

Firstly
,
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teachers
have a higher level of education than our
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friend
do. They have years of experience about
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many
subjects and when
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good
at teaching, they may convey the
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information
in an
You used an adverb ('easily') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('way') instead of another adjective.
easily way
that everybody can fathom it. As an example, when in college I had difficulties in understanding
Possible spelling mistake. 'maths' is British English.
maths
. Then, a
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friend
of mine
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told
me about a math
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teacher
nearby. I took his course and by the
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end
of that year at college I overcame every other my classmates. My grades
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only
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kept
going up afterwords.

Secondly
,
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teachers
have been through life experience that our
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friends
have not. Not
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only
by studying through books
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but
visiting in local did they
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get
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information
. And, that it is one of the most
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important
source of way to find it and to pass such
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information
on that
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make
them stronger than any
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friends
.
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Because
when we try something, we
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see
it, we touch it, it is
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very
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different
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than
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just
by covering books.

However
, there are
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some
occasions where we can learn from
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friends
.
For instance
, if we are in a study group preparing for a coming
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test
, there are always
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some
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friends
who
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know
about a specific subject while others
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know
another and
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so
on. Then, we gather all the needed
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information
and do our best in the
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test
.
Besides
, we can corroborate with our
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friends
. Maybe they may not
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know
what we
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
know and
we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
knowledge.

Finally
,
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teachers
are our best tools to
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get
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knowledge
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
from and
they will be ready to
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help
us with everything that we might need.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay people learn things better from those at their own level like friends than from teachers. agree or not v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
337 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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