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People in today's world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. " v.2

People in today's world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. " v. 2
In the modern decade and widespread technology in the world, one of the controversial and considerable issue is using device such as automobiles for movement and transport of goods and individuals. Humankind tend to facilitate of their works and task with easy ways. Admittedly, one of the appreciable human’s inventions is automobile that it is an essential thing in every family. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay. First of all, one of considering issue is time-consuming for everyone in the hectic life style. Automobile enable to easily and fast move goods and individual as soon as possible. In the past, transport is very harshness and long for passenger and good that consequently it is not possible for everyone. in my person life I believe that the automobile can very useful to overcome my different task. if don’t use automobile instead of take walk, I definitely satisfy my task. Secondly, cost of transportation is very critical for trade, passenger. Automobile enable to decrease of fees of transport with a high-speed. For example, decreasing of costs for business can strengthen power of competition in the market. In recent decades, goods can transport from the rest of the world such winks of eyes. Last but not least, humankind tend to sophisticate in different aspect of technology. Demanding advancement is an inherent need for everyone that it enable meet the needs. In conclude, automobile is essential in the modern hectic lifestyle and nobody can deny the role of it in interior life.
In the modern decade and widespread technology in the world, one of the controversial and considerable issue is using device such as
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automobiles
for movement and
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transport
of
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goods
and individuals. Humankind tend to facilitate of their works and task with easy ways.
Admittedly
, one of the appreciable
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human’s inventions
is
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automobile
that it is an essential thing in every family. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.

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First of all
, one of considering issue is time-consuming for everyone in the hectic life style.
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Automobile
enable to
easily
and
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fast
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
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goods
and individual as
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soon
as possible. In the past,
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transport
is
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very
harshness and long for passenger and
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good
that
consequently
it is not possible for everyone.
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in
my person life I believe that the
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automobile
can
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very
useful to overcome my
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different
task.
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if
don’t
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use
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automobile
instead
of take walk, I definitely satisfy my task.

Secondly
, cost of transportation is
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very
critical for trade, passenger.
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Automobile
enable to decrease of fees of
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transport
with
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a high-speed
.
For example
, decreasing of costs for business can strengthen power of competition in the market. In recent decades,
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goods
can
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transport
from the rest of the world such winks of eyes.

Last
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but
not least, humankind tend to sophisticate in
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different
aspect of technology. Demanding advancement is an inherent need for everyone that it enable
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the needs.

In conclude,
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automobile
is essential in the modern hectic lifestyle and nobody can deny the role of it in interior life.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay People in today's world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. " v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
257 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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