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People have various ways of relieving stress. What are some of the ways that you find most effective in relieving stress? Give reasons and examples to support your response. v.2

People have various ways of relieving stress. What are some of the ways that you find most effective in relieving stress? Give reasons and examples to support your response. v. 2
Since the introduction of technology, competitive environment and abrupt changes and advances would be prevailing features of the developed societies. Therefore, people’s concerns to put up with the various tastes and keep up with current trends to reach their goals would be inevitable. People based on their different characteristics and interests choose various ways to tranquil and get rid of these worries. I personally believe that physical activities and reading books are the best effective solutions. The following essay deals with the reasons supporting this point of view. Undoubtedly, exercising and being physically active contribute to a more healthy life. In fact, physical activities not only helps the body’s organs to function properly and consequently guarantee a high percentage of our physical health but also leads to feeling happy and satisfied and mental health. Therefore, a person who lives a healthy life and make a lot of attempts to enjoy his life would be capable of encountering the probable tensions and overcome them. In addition, doing exercises and especially take part in group sports play an efficient role in relieving the daily stresses. Since, conducting these activities are the best way to express the repressed thought and feelings, alleviating the worries and relax. Furthermore, reading any kinds of books varying from novels to instructive scientific books would be a good way to distract our attention from our problems. For instance, gripping stories or exciting cutting-edge information in books can be attractive enough to make us put all our attention on them and have no extra time or even free mind to think about our daily worries and difficulties. Moreover, reading more books encourage people to accustom to reading and cause learning more critical issues and broadening their horizon. And as an ideal purpose of every society, public awareness about the psychological measures to subjugate our irritating tensions and worries would be achieved. Finally, it can be concluded that according to my taste and creed, exercising and reading books are the most influential approaches to relieve harmful stresses.
Since the introduction of technology, competitive environment and abrupt
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changes
and advances would be prevailing features of the developed societies.
Therefore
,
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people
’s concerns to put up with the various tastes and
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keep
up with
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current
trends to reach their goals would be inevitable.
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People
based on their
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different
characteristics and interests choose various ways to tranquil and
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get
rid of these
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worries
. I
personally
believe that physical activities and
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reading
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books
are the best effective solutions. The following essay deals with the reasons supporting this point of view.

Undoubtedly
, exercising and being
physically
active contribute to a more healthy life. In fact, physical activities not
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only
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helps
the body’s organs to function
properly
and
consequently
guarantee a high percentage of our physical health
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but
also
leads to feeling happy and satisfied and mental health.
Therefore
, a person who
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lives
a healthy life and
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make
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a lot of
attempts to enjoy his life would be capable of encountering the probable tensions and overcome them.
In addition
, doing exercises and
especially
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take part
in group sports play an efficient role in relieving the daily
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stresses
. Since, conducting these activities are the best way to express the repressed
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thought
and feelings, alleviating the
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worries
and relax.

Furthermore
,
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reading
any kinds of
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books
varying from novels to instructive scientific
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books
would be a
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good
way to distract our attention from our problems.
For instance
, gripping stories or exciting cutting-edge information in
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books
can be attractive
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enough
to
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make
us put all our attention on them and have no extra time or even free mind to
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think
about our daily
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worries
and difficulties.
Moreover
,
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reading
more
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books
encourage
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people
to accustom to
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reading
and cause learning more critical issues and broadening their horizon. And as an ideal purpose of every society, public awareness about the psychological measures to subjugate our irritating tensions and
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worries
would
be achieved
.

Finally
, it can
be concluded
that according to my taste and creed, exercising and
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reading
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books
are the most influential approaches to relieve harmful
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stresses
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People have various ways of relieving stress. What are some of the ways that you find most effective in relieving stress? Give reasons and examples to support your response. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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