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people have less time to prepare food, which has given a boost to availability of convenience foods at stores. v.1

people have less time to prepare food, which has given a boost to availability of convenience foods at stores. v. 1
In this modern age, people have less time to prepare food, which has given a boost to availability of convenience foods at stores. Such tendency certainly saves time but not without some drawbacks. This essay will discuss how these disadvantages outweigh the advantage of store-bought food. To begin with, these easy cook meals have more shelf life than regular home cooked food which is achieved only by adding unhealthy additives to food items. Although, these chemicals are not added in large amounts or approved by the government, daily consumption of such meals can increase the risk of getting diseases. For instance, in my country, India, Maggie one of the favourite ready to cook foods was famous popular as it took only 2 minutes to cook. But later it was found that the country’s favourite snack contained lead, which is hazardous to health. In addition to the above drawback we can also see the changes in food consumption trend. When people find an easy way to cook they buy more and more convenience food instead of making any effort in cooking at home. For example, frozen pizza has become the most treasured food items in the USA, as these can be stored for months together. Because of this unhealthy habit people are becoming obese and victims of heart diseases. In contradiction to the disadvantages, convenience food can be very helpful when there is no time to cook or proper kitchen. So, anyone can rely upon them to save some time and effort if they are not relied upon daily. In conclusion, convenience food causes more problems than benefits. In my opinion, these disadvantages outweigh the advantages because other than saving time there is nothing good or healthy about these products.
In this modern age,
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people
have less
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time
to prepare
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food
, which has
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given
a boost to availability of
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convenience
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foods
at stores. Such tendency
certainly
saves
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time
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but
not without
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some
drawbacks. This essay will discuss how these disadvantages outweigh the advantage of store-
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bought
food.

To
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begin
with, these easy cook meals have more shelf life than regular home cooked
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food
which
is achieved
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only
by adding unhealthy additives to
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food
items. Although, these chemicals are not
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added
in large amounts or approved by the
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government
, daily consumption of such meals can increase the
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risk
of getting diseases.
For instance
, in my country, India, Maggie one of the
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favourite
ready to cook
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foods
was
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famous
popular as it took
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only
2 minutes to cook.
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But
later it
was found
that the country’s
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favourite
snack contained lead, which is hazardous to health.

In addition
to the above drawback we can
also
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see
the
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changes
in
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food
consumption trend. When
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people
find an easy way to cook they
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buy
more and more
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convenience
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food
instead
of making any effort in cooking at home.
For example
, frozen pizza has become the most treasured
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food
items in the USA, as these can
be stored
for months together.
Because of this
unhealthy habit
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people
are becoming obese and victims of heart diseases.

In contradiction to the disadvantages,
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convenience
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food
can be
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very
helpful when there is no
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time
to cook or proper kitchen.
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So
, anyone can rely upon them to save
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some
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time
and effort if they are not relied upon daily.

In conclusion
,
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convenience
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food
causes more problems than benefits. In my opinion, these disadvantages outweigh the advantages
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because
other than saving
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time
there is nothing
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good
or healthy about these products.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay people have less time to prepare food, which has given a boost to availability of convenience foods at stores. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
289 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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