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People find it very difficult to speak in public or to give presentation before an audience. Do you think public speaking skill is really very important? Give reasons. Some people say that public speaking should be taught at school. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

People find it very difficult to speak in public or to give presentation before an audience. Do you think public speaking skill is really very important? Give reasons. Some people say that public speaking should be taught at school. v. 1
Nowadays, there have been ongoing debate about the roles of adverts in the society. Some believe that it gives us the product information which may be beneficial to us, while I often argue that advertising leads us to purchase such a thing which may be not required. In this essay, I will discuss relevant reasons and supporting examples. Examining the latter view, primary argument supporters would put forward is that the marketing department of the companies focuses on specific age groups to increase their revenue. Adverts, for example, contain images of cartoons and chocolates which attract children to buy chocolates or sugary products. This lead them for the obesity in very young age. Furthermore, there is a plethora of product marketing such as pizza, burger or coke, could be unhealthy for one. Thus, promoting the product might lead a person for the health related issues. In addition to above mentioned points, there are many advertisings where one cannot confirm the facts. A good example of this is a body cream for fairness. In reality, no one can get fairness in just four weeks as shown in the promo. On top of that, multinational companies are using popular actors, sportsmen, or social media influence to promote their products. These kind of marketings attracts their fan following and huge amount of the people. Each influence has minimum of few million followers on social media platform and targeting this group has become easy by posting a post, for instance. To conclude, while many people vary their opinion about this encouragement from advertising, I strongly believe that none can verify facts and figures behind this advert by seeing a minute video. These are just promos which could help companies to increase their top line.
Nowadays, there have been ongoing debate about the roles of adverts in the society.
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Some
believe that it gives us the
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product
information which may be beneficial to us, while I
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often
argue that advertising leads us to
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purchase
such a thing which may be not required. In this essay, I will discuss relevant reasons and supporting examples.

Examining the latter view, primary argument supporters would put forward is that the marketing department of the
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companies
focuses on specific age groups to increase their revenue. Adverts,
for example
, contain images of cartoons and chocolates which attract children to
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buy
chocolates or sugary
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products
. This lead them for the obesity in
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very
young age.
Furthermore
, there is a plethora of
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product
marketing such as pizza, burger or coke, could be unhealthy for one.
Thus
, promoting the
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product
might lead a person for the health related issues.

In addition
to above mentioned points, there are
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many
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advertisings
where one cannot confirm the facts. A
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good
example of this is a body cream for fairness. In reality, no one can
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get
fairness in
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just
four weeks as shown in the promo.
On top of that
, multinational
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companies
are using popular actors, sportsmen, or social media influence to promote their
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products
.
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These kind
of
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marketings
attracts their fan following and huge amount of the
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people
. Each influence has minimum of few million followers on social media platform and targeting this group has become easy by posting a post,
for instance
.

To conclude
, while
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many
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people
vary their opinion about this encouragement from advertising, I
strongly
believe that none can verify facts and figures behind this advert by seeing a minute video. These are
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just
promos which could
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help
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companies
to increase their top line.
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IELTS essay People find it very difficult to speak in public or to give presentation before an audience. Do you think public speaking skill is really very important? Give reasons. Some people say that public speaking should be taught at school. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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