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people eat more processed food than they did in the past. why is this? what are the effects of this? v.11

people eat more processed food than they did in the past. why is this? what are the effects of this? v. 11
People consume the bigger amount of processed meal now than they used to do in the past. This happens due to the busy lifestyle and high prices for fresh products. This essay will take a look at the main reasons, why it happens, and the effects, which processed feed has. Nowadays life is extremely fast. Therefore, people have less time to prepare fresh feed than they did have earlier. This leads community to buy and consume products, which are already ready to be eaten. Another crucial factor is money. Now the prices of processed cuisine, especially taking in consideration unhealthy options, are low compared to previous years. This fact makes it more adorable for customers. As a result, more processed food is consumed now. The prime examples are the local shops, which mostly sell prepared to eat food (for instance, fast food), and have a big income. All these reasons lead to the significantly bad effects. The first thing to mention is an obesity around the humans, that has become obvious. Processed meal, such as sweet snacks and bars, makes people immediately gain weight. The second thing is health diseases. It means that nowadays people are more likely to have problems with the heart and stomach. These diseases are caused by junk, processed snack and bad eating habits. In conclusion, nowadays processed meal has become popular around customers. But unfortunately, consuming a huge number of processed meal has the remarkably negative effects on human beings, such as health troubles and overweight issues.
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consume the bigger amount of
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processed
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meal
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now
than they
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used
to do in the past. This happens due to the busy lifestyle and high prices for fresh products. This essay will take a look at the main reasons, why it happens, and the effects, which
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processed
feed has.

Nowadays life is
extremely
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fast
.
Therefore
,
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people
have less time to prepare fresh feed than they did have earlier. This leads community to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
and consume products, which are already ready to
be eaten
. Another crucial factor is money.
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Now
the prices of
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processed
cuisine,
especially
taking in consideration unhealthy options, are low compared to previous years. This fact
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makes
it more adorable for customers.
As a result
, more
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processed
food
is consumed
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now
. The prime examples are the local shops, which
mostly
sell prepared to eat food (
for instance
,
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fast
food), and have a
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big
income.

All these reasons lead to the
significantly
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bad
effects. The
first
thing to mention is an obesity around the humans, that has become obvious.
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Processed
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meal
, such as sweet snacks and bars,
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makes
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people
immediately gain weight. The second thing is health diseases. It means that nowadays
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people
are more likely to have problems with the heart and stomach. These diseases
are caused
by junk,
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processed
snack and
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bad
eating habits.

In conclusion
, nowadays
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processed
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meal
has become popular around customers.
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But
unfortunately, consuming a huge number of
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processed
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meal
has the
remarkably
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negative
effects on human beings, such as health troubles and overweight issues.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay people eat more processed food than they did in the past. why is this? what are the effects of this? v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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