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People eat more processed food now than in the past. Task 1: what is the reason behind this? Task 2: what effects might people have by this? v.1

People eat more processed food now than in the past. Task 1: what is the reason behind this? Task 2: what effects might people have by this? v. 1
People consume more fast food than they used in the past. The main reason why this is happening is mainly because processed food is considered to be the most convenient ways of consumption and the result of this is possibly the risk of obesity and atrophy. People prefer to eat more fast food by virtue of their convenience. To be more lucid, no sooner had processed food been developed than the life of people who don't have time to cook at home became considerably easier. Furthermore, processed food is considered by many people much cheaper than unprocessed one, which means that people can easily order it again and again. For example, a research conducted by Russian scientist found that 33% of fast food eaters order fast food as they are busy with their academic or professional purpose, and 26% of eaters prefer processed food because of their lower price. It is common knowledge that this way of consumption gives rise to obesity or atrophy. To be more accurate, today all processed food is genetically modified, which means that the chemicals affect us toxically. Furthermore, some restaurants may use poor quality product which can effect on the health of consumer negatively and can cause atrophy. For example, a recent research showed that, but for such poor quality fast food, 40 million people wouldn't suffer from poisoning. In conclusion, today people will consumesume more processed food by virtue of their convenience and effect of this phenomenon is that people are suffering symptoms of poisoning and obesity
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processed
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been developed
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people
who don't have time to cook at home became
considerably
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much cheaper than unprocessed one, which means that
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eaters order
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as they are busy with their academic or professional purpose, and 26% of eaters prefer
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for such poor quality
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, 40 million
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wouldn't suffer from poisoning.

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by virtue of their convenience and effect of this phenomenon is that
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are suffering symptoms of poisoning and obesity
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IELTS essay People eat more processed food now than in the past. Task 1: what is the reason behind this? Task 2: what effects might people have by this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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