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Nowadays there are many medical surveys cost treatment to reduce health problems. Who should conduct them governments, individuals or private companies, in your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own experiences. v.2

Nowadays there are many medical surveys cost treatment to reduce health problems. Who should conduct them governments, individuals or private companies, in your opinion? v. 2
Medical science is a powerful weapon which can be used to run the world on a progressive track. Likewise, there is a majority of people in many countries who are facing poverty, malnutrition and many other issues which are solved with the help of medical. One of the most controversial issue today leads to that, medical treatment surveys are helping people; but who should conduct these surveys? In the upcoming paragraphs I am going to give reasons for this trend with some relevant examples and assertions according to my experiences. The first step to understand that, who can be better in conducting surveys; governments, individuals or private companies? One of the prominent reason is authorities. Similarly, government should conduct surveys as they have distinct facilities to approach people in different place either its big cities or small countryside areas. Only government is the one which has this authority to approach any type of place in there country. Although, as every individual have their personal life as well, so that will be difficult for them to leave their personal work and go to different place to access people. While its responsibility of government to help their citizens, so it will be easy for them to conduct surveys. On the other hand, the second and foremost reason is advanced doctors. As we all know that, government has numerous facilities which are highly beneficial. However, there are many people who are suffering from rare diseases which are neither well know by individuals nor by private companies and due to this only government can find out about these diseases with the help of advanced doctors and cure them. A good illustration to this is, in india this is responsibility of government to conduct these type of surveys. In 2018, Hindustan times newspaper revealed that government vanished 70% of diseases from many places by conducting surveys through the help of great doctors as well. In conclusion, I tend to believe that, its significant to have all the major facilities and enough money to approach different types places for conducting surveys, whereas, government has all those features and this is the best option which can heal people effectively and efficiently.
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used
to run the world on a progressive
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track
.
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people
in
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many
countries
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who
are facing poverty, malnutrition and
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many
other issues which
are solved
with the
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help
of medical. One of the most controversial issue
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today
leads to that, medical treatment
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surveys
are helping
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people
;
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but
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who
should
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conduct
these
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surveys
? In the upcoming paragraphs I am going to give reasons for this trend with
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some
relevant examples and assertions according to my experiences.

The
first
step to understand that,
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who
can be better in conducting
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surveys
;
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governments
, individuals or private
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companies
? One of the prominent reason is authorities.
Similarly
,
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government
should
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conduct
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surveys
as they have distinct facilities to approach
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people
in
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different
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place
either its
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big
cities or
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small
countryside areas.
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Only
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government
is the one which has this authority to approach any type of
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place
in there country. Although, as every individual have their personal life
as well
,
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so
that will be difficult for them to
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leave
their personal work and go to
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different
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place
to access
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people
. While its responsibility of
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government
to
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help
their citizens,
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so
it will be easy for them to
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conduct
surveys.

On the other hand
, the second and foremost reason
is advanced
doctors. As we all know that,
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government
has numerous facilities which are
highly
beneficial.
However
, there are
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many
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people
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who
are suffering from rare diseases which are neither well know by individuals nor by private
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companies
and due to this
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only
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government
can find out about these diseases with the
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help
of advanced doctors and cure them. A
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good
illustration to this is, in
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india
this is responsibility of
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government
to
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conduct
these type of
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surveys
. In 2018, Hindustan times newspaper revealed that
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government
vanished 70% of diseases from
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many
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places
by conducting
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surveys
through the
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help
of great doctors
as well
.

In conclusion
, I tend to believe that,
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its
significant to have all the major facilities and
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enough
money to approach
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different
types
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places
for conducting
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surveys
, whereas,
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government
has all those features and this is the best option which can heal
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people
effectively
and
efficiently
.
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39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays there are many medical surveys cost treatment to reduce health problems. Who should conduct them governments, individuals or private companies, in your opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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