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Letter to the Student Body Our meal plans offer breakfast, lunch, and dinner. Many of us don’t have time to eat breakfast and the dinning rooms are always empty in the morning as a result. This is a clear waste of money for students. The administration ha v.1

Letter to the Student Body Our meal plans offer breakfast, lunch, and dinner. Many of us don’t have time to eat breakfast and the dinning rooms are always empty in the morning as a result. This is a clear waste of money for students. The administration ha v. 1
Nowadays, media choose to underline issues and emergency events instead of focusing on positive aspect. Consequently, it is harmful for the population. I argued that they should find the right balance between positive and negative information diffused in TV. In this essay, I will discuss both parts of the question and give several reasons to support my point-views. First of all, people are more interested by global issues than avantageous facts. Indeed, generally, the amount of people who watch news go up during tragical incident. This is because, they are preoccupied by problem and try to get the maximum of information, in order to understand the different causes. For instance, in France, the highest audience is outlined during a presidential election or an attempt. The main objective of a TV channel is to have the most viewer. Therefore, for this reason they decided to focus on making audience. Moreover, many different events could be quoted in TV, such as the work of the association. People should be given more importance for their actions. This could help them to give more importance to what they are doing for the society and in their job, but also, for themselves because the country is not only composed by famous people or issues. For example, in some countries, such as Tunisia, the media give more importance to their citizen than diffusing global actual issues. It is important to give meaningful to the society and give them a more enhance place in the media. In conclusion, the media has a crucial place in our dailylife because they inform people about the world. However, they focus on troubles more than the society to attract more viewer. I believe that the population should be given an extensive place in the media
Nowadays,
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media
choose to underline
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issues
and emergency
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events
instead
of focusing on
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positive
aspect.
Consequently
, it is harmful for the population. I argued that they should find the right balance between
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positive
and
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negative
information diffused in TV. In this essay, I will discuss both parts of the question and
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give
several reasons to support my point-views.

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First of all
,
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people
are more
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interested by
global
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issues
than
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avantageous
facts.
Indeed
,
generally
, the amount of
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people
who
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watch
news go up during
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tragical
incident. This is
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because
, they
are preoccupied
by problem and try to
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get
the maximum of information, in order to understand the
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different
causes.
For instance
, in France, the highest audience
is outlined
during a presidential election or an attempt. The main objective of a TV channel is to have the most viewer.
Therefore
,
for this reason
they decided to focus on making audience.

Moreover
,
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many
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different
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events
could
be quoted
in TV, such as the work of the association.
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People
should be
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given
more importance for their actions. This could
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help
them to
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give
more importance to what they are doing for the society and in their job,
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but
also
, for themselves
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because
the country is not
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only
composed by
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famous
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people
or
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issues
.
For example
, in
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some
countries, such as Tunisia, the
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media
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give
more importance to their citizen than diffusing global actual
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issues
. It is
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important
to
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give
meaningful to the society and
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give
them a more enhance place in the media.

In conclusion
, the
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media
has a crucial place in our
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dailylife
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because
they inform
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people
about the world.
However
, they focus on troubles more than the society to attract more viewer. I believe that the population should be
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given
an extensive place in the
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media
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Letter to the Student Body Our meal plans offer breakfast, lunch, and dinner. Many of us don’t have time to eat breakfast and the dinning rooms are always empty in the morning as a result. This is a clear waste of money for students. The administration ha v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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