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People attend college or university for many different reasons. Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.3

People attend college or university for many different reasons. Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3
Every student attends university in his/her life. Universities and colleges play an important role in any student' s life because it helps them to mold their interests and opens the door to future aspects like research or employment. People attend universities for several reasons. In my view, people attend college or university to expand knowledge and to gain foreign exposure. Firstly, college life helps students to have exposure to many areas of study. Students show interest in learning the basics of these courses. thus improving their knowledge. For instance, during my sophomore year in college, I struggled to pick a major from the enormous available majors like Science, Mathematics, Engineering, Arts and so on. In addition, new majors were added like Artifical intelligence, pharmaceutical engineering, modern literature which would be in demand. Somehow, by eliminating least interest courses, I was able to narrow down to 10 majors. Then, I decided to know the basics of my selected majors. I went to my college library and read the basic textbooks of those majors, interacted with the students who were already studying, surfed and researched on the internet to know the scope, type of jobs and salaries. Finally, after thorough research and immense effort, I was able to pick one major. By the time I decided, I had become a jack of all fruits. My knowledge on those majors expanded greatly because of my college' s rule to pick a major. Secondly, people also attend universities to have international exposure. Universities that welcome foreign nationals have a majority of international students than local students. For instance, I want to do my masters in the United States of America because I completed under graduation in India. I don' t have any international exposure. In order to gain that, I want to study abroad. Knowing different people and their cultures can improve my circle of connections. I can also know about the quality of education, research topics, the lifestyle of a foreign country like America. In addition, I can learn more skills than I would learn in my home country because I will be engaged with different mindsets of people which might change my way of thinking in a positive way. Furthermore, having international exposure can help me in securing a good job with high pay. As you see, attending university may help in having an international exposure. All in all, attending universities and colleges helps students to expand knowledge and fulfill their dreams of having a good job.
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student
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attends
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university
in his/her life.
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and colleges play an
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role in any
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helps
them to mold their interests and opens the door to future aspects like research or employment.
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attend
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universities
for several reasons. In my view,
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people
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attend
college or
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university
to expand
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knowledge
and to gain foreign exposure.

Firstly
, college life
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helps
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students
to have
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exposure
to
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many
areas of study.
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show
interest in learning the basics of these courses.
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thus
improving their
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knowledge
.
For instance
, during my sophomore year in college, I struggled to pick a
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major
from the enormous available
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majors
like Science, Mathematics, Engineering, Arts and
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so
on.
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, new
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majors
were
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added
like
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Artifical
intelligence, pharmaceutical engineering, modern literature which would be in demand. Somehow, by eliminating
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least
interest courses, I was able to narrow down to 10
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majors
. Then, I decided to know the basics of my selected
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majors
. I went to my college library and read the basic textbooks of those
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majors
, interacted with the
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students
who were already studying, surfed and researched on the internet to know the scope, type of jobs and salaries.
Finally
, after thorough research and immense effort, I was able to pick one
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major
. By the time I decided, I had become a jack of all fruits. My
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knowledge
on those
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majors
expanded
greatly
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because
of my
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to pick a major.

Secondly
,
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also
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attend
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universities
to have
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international
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exposure
.
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Universities
that welcome foreign nationals have a majority of
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international
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students
than local
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students
.
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, I want to do my masters in the United States of America
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I completed under graduation in India. I
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don&
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international
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exposure
. In order to gain that, I want to study abroad. Knowing
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different
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people
and their cultures can
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improve
my circle of connections. I can
also
know about the quality of education, research topics, the lifestyle of a foreign country like America.
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, I can learn more
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skills
than I would learn in my home country
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because
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be engaged
with
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different
mindsets of
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people
which might
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my way of thinking in a
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positive
way.
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, having
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international
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exposure
can
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help
me in securing a
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good
job with high pay. As you
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see
, attending
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university
may
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help
in having an
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international
exposure.

All in all, attending
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universities
and colleges
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helps
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students
to expand
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knowledge
and fulfill their dreams of having a
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good
job.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay People attend college or university for many different reasons. Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
415 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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