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People attend college or university for many different reasons. Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

People attend college or university for many different reasons. Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Learning is a process which never ends, we keep learning throughout our lives. Many people opine that learning is more effective in a group rather than learning alone. The essay will discuss why it completely supports the aforementioned statement. To begin with, team work has proven to be an effective way to reach a desired goal. There are justifiable evidences which state that team work not only makes achieving a task easier, but also helps in building good relationships among individuals within a team. A pilot study done in the USA further strengthens the claims which highlights the significance of group work over working alone. A group consists of people from different study backgrounds and cultural outlook, and their approach towards a problem may vary from each other. But, this significantly helps increase a person’s understanding about a situation and his ability to tackle the issue. However, working alone does has the flexibility of working at one’s own pace. But the learning is limited to the amount of knowledge the individual already possesses. Although working in a group can be a tough task at times, which can create differences of opinion, but different discussions and approaches do open unexplored avenues which lead to learning. For instance, a study states that employers prefer to hire individuals who are more efficient in working as a team than alone. This is the prime reason why children’s in schools and colleges are given projects which require them to work in a group. To conclude, working in a group a person not only learns essential traits effective to work in a group. It even helps a person widens his horizons and gives detailed understanding, which can be achieved when working alone. Thus, it is completely preposterous to claim that a person learns more when working alone
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opine that
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group
rather
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learning
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. The essay will discuss why it completely supports the aforementioned statement.

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begin
with,
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team
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work
has proven to be an effective way to reach a desired goal. There are justifiable evidences which state that
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team
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work
not
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achieving a task easier,
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also
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helps
in building
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good
relationships among individuals within a
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team
. A pilot study done in the USA
further
strengthens the claims which highlights the significance of
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group
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. A
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understanding about a situation and his ability to tackle the issue.

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,
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working
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does has the flexibility of
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at one’s
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pace.
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the
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learning
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to the amount of knowledge the individual already possesses. Although
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in a
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can be a tough task at times, which can create differences of opinion,
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but
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different
discussions and approaches do open unexplored avenues which lead to
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learning
.
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, a study states that employers prefer to hire individuals who are more efficient in
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working
as a
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team
than
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alone
. This is the prime reason why children’s in schools and colleges are
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projects which require them to
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in a group.

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,
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in a
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a
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learns essential traits effective to
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in a
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group
. It even
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person
widens his horizons and gives detailed understanding, which can
be achieved
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working
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alone
.
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, it is completely preposterous to claim that a
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person
learns more when
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working
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alone
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IELTS essay People attend college or university for many different reasons. Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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