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People are using a lot of online language translation apps. Are the advantages more than disadvantages of such services. v.12

People are using a lot of online language translation apps. Are the advantages more than disadvantages of such services. v. 12
According to some people, social interaction among the people is increased because of the scientific advancements, while others differ with it. In my opinion, electronic devices facilitate the process of socialization; however, this essay will discuss both views. On the one hand, electronic gadgets allow people to stay connected together. Undoubtedly, communicating with each other is much easier than ever before. This is because, through various inventions, it is possible to make contacts regardless of geographical location. Moreover, everyone can express emotions, discuss views, share pictures and documents comfortably, which were quite hard in past days. Thus, modern technology makes the way of networking convenient, which resulted in forming strong social relation. For instance, a recent survey conducted by Wikipedia revealed that had a mobile phone not been invented, the process of communication would have been 50% lower. On the other hand, using technology in some cases curbs the actual interaction of the relationship. The reason behind that is, many people get addicted with these items and spend vast amount of time in front of the screen instead of passing quality time with family. Consequently, too much attachment with the virtual world unintentionally let these people to less sensitive to others. As a result, this trend not only curbs the face to face communication, but also real intimacy of the relationship. Despite this, individuals can access anyone if they wish by using technology and that might strengthen the bonding. For example, it is often seen that many tour plans by the friends are taken while chatting over social networking sites. In conclusion, although the scientific breakthrough has positive influence on the social connection, some people think it reduces the interest of relation. Nevertheless, as long as technology is employed carefully, its effects will be beneficial for socializing.
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,
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social
interaction among the
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people
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is
increased
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because
of the scientific advancements, while others differ with it. In my opinion, electronic devices facilitate the process of socialization;
however
, this essay will discuss both views.

On the one hand, electronic gadgets
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allow
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people
to stay connected together.
Undoubtedly
, communicating with each
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other
is much easier than ever
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before
. This is
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because
, through various inventions, it is possible to
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make
contacts regardless of geographical location.
Moreover
, everyone can express emotions, discuss views, share pictures and documents
comfortably
, which were quite
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hard
in past days.
Thus
, modern
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technology
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the way of networking convenient, which resulted in forming strong
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
relation.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by Wikipedia revealed that had a mobile phone not
been invented
, the process of communication would have been 50% lower.

On the
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other
hand, using
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technology
in
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some
cases curbs the actual interaction of the relationship. The reason behind
that is
,
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many
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people
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get
addicted with these items and spend vast amount of time in front of the screen
instead
of passing quality time with family.
Consequently
, too much attachment with the virtual world
unintentionally
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let
these
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people
to less sensitive to others.
As a result
, this trend not
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only
curbs the face to face communication,
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but
also
real intimacy of the relationship. Despite this, individuals can access anyone if they wish by using
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technology
and that might strengthen the bonding.
For example
, it is
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often
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seen
that
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many
tour plans by the friends
are taken
while chatting over
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social
networking sites.

In conclusion
, although the scientific breakthrough has
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positive
influence on the
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social
connection,
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some
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people
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think
it
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reduces
the interest of relation.
Nevertheless
, as long as
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technology
is employed
carefully
, its effects will be beneficial for socializing.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay People are using a lot of online language translation apps. Are the advantages more than disadvantages of such services. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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