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More and more people are using a lot of online language translation apps. Are there more advantages or more disadvantages of such services? v.2

More and more people are using a lot of online language translation apps. Are there more advantages or more disadvantages of such services? v. 2
It is widely believed that we can educate ourselves by using television, however, others argue that it can be used only for fun. I, personally, think that television is quite useful for fun, but not more than education. There are many reasons that are why television is a handy device to increase our knowledge. Such as, we can increase our knowledge about animals just by seeing their wild lives on television channels. Moreover, television helps us to improve our knowledge about science and technology as well. For example, yesterday I watched a documentary about electric cars that are being made in Tesla that how it is going to work with oil, and it helped me a lot to understand the future of cars in our world. On the other hand, people say that television is a useful device for relaxation. There are many comedy programs that run on the television at night and help people to get relaxed after a hectic day at the office. These television programs also play a role to make the twisted family life happy, because by watching some program people feel happy and try to resolve their problems. For instance, a program called Comedy with Alex comes at night where the host invites some celebrity and a family who are not happy with each other and ask about their problems and then try to solve their problems with fun. In conclusion, despite many people argue that television plays an important role in making people live better with its’ comedy programs, however, I agree with that kind of people who think television plays an important role in educating us about the world issues.
It is
widely
believed that we can educate ourselves by using
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television
,
however
, others argue that it can be
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used
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only
for fun. I,
personally
,
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think
that
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television
is quite useful for fun,
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but
not more than education.

There are
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many
reasons that are why
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television
is a handy device to increase our knowledge. Such as, we can increase our knowledge about animals
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just
by seeing their wild
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lives
on
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television
channels.
Moreover
,
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television
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helps
us to
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improve
our knowledge about science and technology
as well
.
For example
, yesterday I
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watched
a documentary about electric cars that are
being made
in Tesla that how it is going to work with oil, and it
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helped
me a lot to understand the future of cars in our world.

On the other hand
,
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people
say that
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television
is a useful device for relaxation. There are
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many
comedy
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programs
that run on the
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television
at night and
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help
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people
to
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get
relaxed after a hectic day at the office. These
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television
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programs
also
play a role to
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make
the twisted family life happy,
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because
by watching
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some
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program
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people
feel happy and try to resolve their problems.
For instance
, a
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program
called Comedy with Alex
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comes
at night where the host invites
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some
celebrity and a family who are not happy with each other and ask about their problems and then try to solve their problems with fun.

In conclusion
, despite
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many
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people
argue that
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television
plays an
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important
role in making
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people
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live
better with
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its’
comedy
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programs
,
however
, I
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agree
with that kind of
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people
who
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think
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television
plays an
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important
role in educating us about the world issues.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More and more people are using a lot of online language translation apps. Are there more advantages or more disadvantages of such services? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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