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Paying all workers the same salary in a company promotes harmony and respect amongst colleagues To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

Paying all workers the same salary in a company promotes harmony and respect amongst colleagues v. 2
There is a notion that same pay scale for all employees in an organization promotes harmony and respect. This essay will discuss why I completely disagree with this perception. To embark on, the cardinal merit of having equal salary at all levels is that it eradicates inequality of income. Although the discrimination based on income level will be eliminated, it also promotes togetherness among the workers. In contrast, higher income to a team member at same designation creates professional ego which is not good for work environment. As a result of paying all workers same salary, the motivation to perform can be standardized. From my perspective, I strongly disagree with this perception because it de-motivates high performing professionals and high cadre professionals demand more pay. With regards to the former, when a good quality performance is not rewarded financially, it creates a sense of resentment in the employee towards work. As for higher designation, there are few designations such as chief manager and executive directors, which demand more presence both physically and mentally as the risk of decision-making with respect to business performance is substantially greater. For instance, executive director of a division handles more responsibility compared to any other professional in the organization, so it is justified to pay such personnel more salary. By virtue of this, it has to be remembered that skilled talent comes at a superior cost. In conclusion, while same pay mitigates inequality of income, in my point of view, it demoralizes high performing work-horses and there will not be any substantive value for top-level management.
There is a notion that same
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pay
scale for all employees in an organization promotes harmony and respect. This essay will discuss why I completely disagree with this perception.

To embark on, the cardinal merit of having equal salary at all levels is that it eradicates inequality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
income
. Although the discrimination based on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
income
level will
be eliminated
, it
also
promotes togetherness among the workers.
In contrast
, higher
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income
to a team member at same designation creates
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professional
ego which is not
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good
for work environment.
As a result
of paying all workers same salary, the motivation to perform can
be standardized
.

From my perspective, I
strongly
disagree with this perception
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because
it
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de-motivates
high performing
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professionals
and high cadre
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professionals
demand more
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pay
.
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
the former, when a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
quality performance is not rewarded
financially
, it creates a sense of resentment in the employee towards work. As for higher designation, there are few designations such as chief manager and executive directors, which demand more presence both
physically
and mentally as the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of decision-making with respect to business performance is
substantially
greater.
For instance
, executive director of a division
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
handles
more responsibility compared to any other
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professional
in the organization,
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so
it
is justified
to
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pay
such personnel more salary. By virtue of this, it
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has to
be remembered
that skilled talent
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
at a superior cost.

In conclusion
, while same
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pay
mitigates inequality of
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income
, in my point of view, it demoralizes high performing work-horses and there will not be any substantive value for top-level management.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Paying all workers the same salary in a company promotes harmony and respect amongst colleagues v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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