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Some people believe that advertising informs customers about products and services that can enhance their lives. Other people feel that it manipulates consumers into purchasing items they have no real need for. Which opinion do your support and why? Plea v.2

Some people believe that advertising informs customers about products and services that can enhance their lives. Other people feel that it manipulates consumers into purchasing items they have no real need for. Which opinion do your support and why? Plea v. 2
Saying says that " Seeing is believing. " Means if you see something then you believe in that thing. I think advertising industry work on that idea. In my opinion advertising is more for manipulates consumers into purchasing item even if no requirement than just informs customers about products and services for better life-style. In my support I can give various reasons which mentioned in following paragraphs. Advertising makers choosing famous person who fits for their product & help to sell increase. They use some psychology there like Amitabh Bachan choosed for Dabar chavanprash, a aryuved tonic which good for health in winter season because it is senior and fit actor. Salman Khan, famous bollywood physically fit actor choosed for undergraments for men. So, people have image of their advertisement actor in mind when they go for buying products. Therefore, because of influence of there actor in their mind, they going to buy for it when go for shopping. Some advertisement are misleading for specific population according their cultural practice. Aryuvedic creams for local application in various places of body are famous in India. Fair & lovely cream, a famous brand of face cream who advertise/claims to increase fairness by using their products in south Asian countries only. In these countries, peoples are brown and black in compare to European people. Therefore, people buy it because subconsciously they want to become fair by hook or crooks. Some young people applies body spreays because of advertisement. According to body spray advertisement, after applies those body sprays girls are attracted towards male' s body because of this seeing advertisement adolescents people buy it. Now some advertisement gets romantic & emotional touch in it which hits people hard and have to take that product. Like jewelry brand advertisement, we see wife gifted diamond and/or gold in anniversary, birthday, etc. This type of advertisements message that in important dates of our human life feels a person special with precious gifts. Because of this emotional touchy ad, husband feels that he have to buy diamond or gold rings in special occasions. Sometimes advertisement give valuable information also which we not going to know without it. Sometimes Government also makes advertisement of their various plans. By seeing this we know about various schemes of Government. So, I think sometimes advertisements gives valuable information, but most of the time it affect manipulates customers into purchasing items.
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; Seeing is believing.
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; Means if you
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something then you believe in that thing. I
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advertising industry work on that
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idea
. In my opinion advertising is more for manipulates consumers into purchasing item even if no requirement than
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just
informs customers about
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products
and services for better life-style. In my support I can give
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various
reasons which mentioned in following paragraphs.

Advertising makers choosing
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famous
person who fits for their
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product
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;
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help
to sell increase. They
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use
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some
psychology there like
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Amitabh
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Bachan
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choosed
for
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Dabar
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chavanprash
,
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a
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tonic which
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good
for health in winter season
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because
it is senior and fit
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actor
. Salman Khan,
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famous
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bollywood
physically
fit
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actor
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choosed
for
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undergraments
for
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men
.
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,
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people
have image of their
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advertisement
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actor
in mind when they go for buying
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products
.
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,
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because
of influence of
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there
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actor
in their mind,
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they going
to
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buy
for it when go for shopping.

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Some
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advertisement
are misleading for specific population according their cultural practice.
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Aryuvedic
creams for local application in
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various
places of
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body
are
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famous
in India.
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Fair
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&amp
; lovely cream, a
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famous
brand of face cream who advertise/claims to increase fairness by using their
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products
in south Asian countries
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only
. In these countries,
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peoples
are brown and black in compare to European
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people
.
Therefore
,
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people
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buy
it
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because
subconsciously
they want to become
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fair
by hook or crooks.
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Some
young
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people
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applies
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body
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spreays
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of
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advertisement
. According to
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body
spray
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advertisement
, after applies those
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body
sprays girls
are attracted
towards
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male&
#039; s
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body
because of this
seeing
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adolescents
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people
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buy
it.

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some
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romantic
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; emotional touch in it which hits
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people
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and
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take that
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product
. Like jewelry brand
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advertisement
, we
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see
wife gifted diamond and/or gold in anniversary, birthday, etc. This type of
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advertisements
message that in
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important
dates of our human life feels a person special with precious gifts.
Because of this
emotional touchy ad, husband feels that he
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have to
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buy
diamond or gold rings in special occasions.

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Sometimes
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advertisement
give valuable information
also
which
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we not going
to know without it.
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Government
also
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makes
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advertisement of
their
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various
plans. By seeing this we know about
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various
schemes of
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Government
.
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, I
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think
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sometimes
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advertisements
gives valuable information,
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but
most of the time it
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affect
manipulates customers into purchasing items.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that advertising informs customers about products and services that can enhance their lives. Other people feel that it manipulates consumers into purchasing items they have no real need for. Which opinion do your support and why? Plea v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
399 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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